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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:39, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Design and description
- "This change could only be applied to the three least-advanced ships, including Effingham, although she did not receive the full upgrade." - This copied and pasted from the Effingham article? Looks like you forgot to switch out the name of the ship.
- I know some ships had a different crew strength when serving as a flagship. Is this applicable here?
- Maybe, but nothing in the sources.
- Construction and career
- "has been the only ship of her name to serve in the Royal Navy" - Might be worth a footnote that HMS Parker (1916) was apparently known as Frobisher for a decent chunk of its construction
- I thought about it, but decided against doing so since Parker was renamed before completion and so didn't actually serve in the RN under that name.
- "In 1929–1930 the ship served with the Atlantic Fleet,[10] By June 1930 her - Period, not a comma
- "By June 1930 her aft superfiring gun had been removed to provide space for a floatplane" - Okay, so I'm half-asleep as a review this, so maybe this is just a comprehension issue, but " four of which were in superfiring pairs fore and aft of the superstructure," sound to me like there were two aft superfiring guns, so its unclear which was removed
- Superfiring pairs means one gun superfiring above the other, not two guns superfiring over another
- References
- The Dreadnought Project is an iffy source. It looks like one of the higher-quality wikis, but it's still a wiki.
- Yes, but's one with the editors vetted by the operators, who are reputable scholars.
- It'll be fine for GA, I guess, but I'd expect a better source for higher levels. Hog Farm Bacon 15:06, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Campbell isn't used
- Need a location for Heathcote
- Other
- It's in a category for being built in Portsmouth, but the prose says it was built in Devonsport
- Unrelated to this article, but worth a thought
- The dab page HMS Frobisher could conceivably be reduced to dual hatnotes per WP:TWODABS, unless there's a third Frobisher not listed there.
That's it for this one. Hog Farm Bacon 04:08, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for looking this one over.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:39, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]