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Last updated: 13:26, 25 March 2024 (UTC) by Cocobb8
Estimated finish date: March 25, 2024
100% reviewed
See what the criteria are and what they are not
1) Well-written
2) Verifiable with no original research
3) Broad in its coverage
4) Neutral:
5) Stable:
6) Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
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Overall:
@Pokelego999, I am starting this review. Please let me know if you have any questions through the review process. Cocobb8 (💬 talk • ✏️ contribs) 21:33, 20 March 2024 (UTC)
Comments from first read-through:
@Pokelego999: The article reads quite well! I do have a couple things I'd need to see fixed. I know it's a lot: if you need some time to revise those, I can put the GA review on hold for now. Let me know! Cocobb8 (💬 talk • ✏️ contribs) 12:49, 21 March 2024 (UTC)
Lead:
Jigglypuff is also very well known for singing a lullaby in the Pokémon anime series.
Two things here. First, could you wikilink to the anime series here instead of in the second paragraph? Second, consider changing part of the sentence to is also known
, as very well known
seems like an audacious claim.
Design and characteristics:
Jigglypuff is a fictional species of Pokémon created for the Pokémon franchise.
We already know this? Either remove it or merge it into the first sentence of the article. I know it's needed as the next few sentences are about the franchise, but that sentence can be re-worked.
Deciding to use a name better suited for its jelly-like appearance, the species was renamed "Jigglypuff", a combination of the words "jiggly" and "puff".
We already know that it's a combination of jiggly and puff as said in the lead; you may remove it. The only reason you should leave it here is if you wanted to explain more about that part of the sentence, which I don't think you would here.
Known as the Balloon Pokémon (...)
Is capitalizing Balloon
necessary?
In video games:
Jigglypuff first appears as one of the one hundred and fifty one species of Pokémon in the Pokémon Red and Blue versions.
Again, repetition. Consider removing it, unless you want to expand that sentence to include new information.
Since Pokémon X and Y, it is a dual Normal/Fairy type.
As someone who has no idea what Pokemon is about, I'm not totally sure what Normal/Fairy type is. How about a little explanation in just a couple words?
(...) game director Masahiro Sakurai selected it to appear due to its similarities to Kirby (...)
. To appear in what? I know it's in the Smash Bros video games, but you might want to clarify it.
(...)instead of recovering Jigglypuff's health like in its home series(...)
. What is home series referring to?
In anime:
Jigglypuff's singing can often prove problematic to the series' protagonists, as it causes all around to fall asleep.
Is all around
referring to everyone (people) around? Might want to be more accurate here.
Jigglypuff's appearances began to decline, eventually making one last appearance in Pokémon: Advanced. It remained absent from the series until Pokémon the Series: Sun and Moon, where it once again became a recurring character.
Move in its own paragraph (and potentially expand it if needed), to show that it's not related to Jigglypuff's behaviour in the Pokemon anime series.
Promotion and reception:
A Jigglypuff Bluetooth speaker was made by GameStop’s ThinkGeek brand, and has been published by the Federal Communications Commission.
Should it say and has been approved by the Federal Communications Commission
instead?
@Pokelego999: The article complies with all Manual of Style guidelines, though I've removed some duplicate links. No issues there. Conducting a spot-check of sources for verifiability, no issues found. I ran Refill, Copyvio detector and IABot, no issues found there either, besides me removing citation 21 (Wikipedia source). This checks out all criteria under 2).
The article is quite stable, no issues found checking the article's history and talk page.
The article is appropriately supported by images, all of which tagged with relevant copyright templates.
This concludes my review of this article.