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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:15, 4 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 16:15, 4 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

@MWright96: Thank you, looking forward to your comments :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 09:37, 5 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "he is often named among the greatest cyclists of all times." - time
• "In 1978, he won his first two Grand Tours, winning both the Vuelta a España and the Tour de France. " - I believe winning both is redundant and needs deleting
• "He bounced back the following year," - recovered

All  Done. Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:38, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Early life and family

• "Hinault had bought the 48-hectare property near Calorguen in 1983." - Use the 48 ha (120 acres) template on 48-hectacre

 Done Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:39, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Amateur career

• "as a reward for passing his school exams" - examinations
• "He took his military service at the young age of 18 over the course of 1973, not racing for the entire year." - How about He was conscripted into the military at age 18, and did not race throughout 1973.?
• "On the road, he raced in the Étoile des Espoirs, a race open to amateurs and young professionals." - took part for the avoidance of close repetition of similar words

All  Done Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:41, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

1975–1977: Gitane

• "who had decided to split up the prize money" - divided is more formal here

 Done

• "His results in his first season were impressive, with seventh at Paris–Nice" - with a seventh at the Paris–Nice

Have done the a, also added "place". Concerning the "the" ahead of bike race names. I know, Phil Liggett always says "the Paris-Nice" and so forth, but I feel this sounds stupid. From the reliable sources at my disposal, I see this is a handled differently. Cyclingnews doesn't use it for instance...

Just to clarify: Obviously I only mean races which start with place names, such as Paris-Nice or Paris-Roubaix. Zwerg Nase (talk) 12:12, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

• "netting him the Promotion Pernod," - how about earning instead?

 Done

• "However, Hinault showed little willingsness" - typo; willingness

 Done

• "lesser known races such as Paris–Camembert, which he won." - events such as the Paris–Camembert

See above.

• "with a second, consecutive victory at the Circuit de la Sarthe," - the comma is redundant

 Done

• "third at the Grand Prix du Midi Libre" - a third place

 Done

• "being beaten to the line for fifth by none other than Eddy Merckx." - "none other than" is redundant and needs deleting

 Done

• " Hinault left the Tour of Flanders before it had even started, gaining him a formal warning by Guimard for his conduct." - drawing

 Done

• "Five days later, at Liège–Bastogne–Liège," - at the

See above.

• "leading Van Impe and Bernard Thévenet by 1:30 minutes by the summit." - heading into

I chose "when crossing"

• Wikilink hairpin to Hairpin turn for non-cycling readers

 Done

• "This also secured his overall victory" - him the overall victory

 Done

1978: Grand Tour breakthrough

• "on which he rode 55 km (34 mi) on his own," - solo

 Done

• "Hinault rode conservatively in the Pyrenees to stay within striking distance of Zoetemelk." - what is meant by striking distance here?

Meaning that he limited the time deficit on the general classification.

• "as was the case on this 12 July." - remove "this"

 Done

• "ended with Zoetemelk, Hinault and the temporary yellow jersey Michel Pollentier" - yellow jersey wearer

 Done

• "but Hinault surprisingly contested the finishing sprint," - "surprisingly" sounds like editorialising to me; should be changed to something neutral or be removed

 Done

1979: Second Tour victory and Classics success

• "with third placed Kuiper already more than 12 minutes behind." - with the third-placed
• "He had escaped from the field a massive 150 km (93 mi) from the finish," - remove "a massive"

Both  Done Zwerg Nase (talk) 09:11, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

1980: Attempt at the Triple Crown

• "dropping out of Paris–Nice." - withdrawing from the

Did withdrawing, for "the" see above.

• "Following fourth place at the prologue" - Following a fourth place

 Done

• "which contained cobbled sections used in Paris–Roubaix," - used in the}

See above.

• "not informing the press, which let to a fallout" - led

 Done

1981: Winning a third Tour de France

• "Some weeks later, he added a victory at the Amstel Gold Race." how many weeks exactly?

Good thing you mentioned this, it was actually earlier. Calender was different back then... Zwerg Nase (talk) 09:18, 9 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

1982: Achieving the Giro–Tour double

• "Zoetemelk was again the runner up," - runner up is hyphenated

 Done

1983: Second Vuelta and the ascent of Fignon

• "He bounced back and took the lead" - came back

 Done

1984: Defeat at Fignon's hands

• "while at the same time scientificly measuring his progress." - typo; scientifically

 Done

1985: The second Giro–Tour double

• "even though his team car rode behind him with the door opened the entire time to ensure that bystanders would have a harder time impeeding him." - typo; should be impeding

Done. Some English spelling I will just never understand...

• The entire second paragraph in this section lacks reliable source(s)

Done. Broke up that part into two paragraphs and forgot to duplicate the source.

• "holding an advantage of five-and-a-half minues on LeMond," - typo; minutes

All  Done. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:31, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

1986: The final season

• "partly due to Hinault deciding that the team" - change the text in bold to squad for variety and to remove close reptition of the same word

Done.

• "Hinault then cracked, coming in ninth, 4:39 behind stage winner LeMond." - 4:39 minutes

Done.

• "He rode the World Championships Road Race, held at Colorado Springs." - held in

Done.

• "He aimed to win, showing surprising effort in his preparation." - editoralising is again present here

Changed to "a lot of".

• "Nevertheless, he finished the race in a disappointing 59th place" - same issue as above

All  Done. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:34, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Retirement

• "the Tour de France organisers, Amaury Sport Organisation (ASO), approached Hinault and invited him to join the management team of the event." - its race management team.

Done.

• "Offers from Bouygues Télécom and a Chinese investor in the mid-2000s did not go through." - fell through.

All  Done. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:35, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Riding style and legacy

• "Hinault would be able to control the pace of races, use his influence with race organisers" - change to event to avoid close reptition of "race"

Have changed the first instance to "the peloton" instead.

• "The riders' strike at Valence d'Agen in the 1978 Tour is cited as the first instance in which Hinault took over this role." - assumed

Done.

• "He urged the riders to protest and ride slowly, but some broke ranks," - disagreed

Chose "did not follow his example".

• "during his Tour wins and his behavior towards fans and officials" - behaviour

Done.

• "who he treated with open disgust." - whom

Done.

• "With an impressive résumé of victories, including all three Grand Tours (all of them more than once)," - rewrite to With a résumé of victories that include all three Grand Tours to avoid editorialising

Done, with "includes" for grammar reasons.

• "Hinault has often been cited among the greatest cyclists of all time." - cited by whom?

Well, I have given two sources of many right behind this statement. Should I write down the authors of that? Those people are not well-known, so I feel that does not add much to the article. The main thing is to source the statement overall. Have added another example in a sentence right behind. Hope this suffices. Let me know. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:44, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I do not believe the authors are required in this instance. MWright96 (talk) 18:48, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Nickname

• "who would use the term to put the young rider in his place." - try to avoid using idioms per MOS:IDIOM

Have changed to "tease the young rider". Still fairly colloquial, but maybe better? Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:46, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I believe that is much better than the previous version. MWright96 (talk) 18:48, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Stance on doping

• "He was handed a one-month suspended ban and fined 1,110 Swiss Francs," - CHF 1,110 per MOS:CURRENCY

Done. Have also wikilinked to Swiss Franc since I feel the currency constitutes a "lesser known currency" per MOS:CURRENCY.

• "To this claim, Hinault replied" - To counter this claim.

Done.

• "he urged the other riders to strike in protest if Froome should compete." - if Froome competed.

All  Done. Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:49, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

References

• The McGannMcGann sfn templates that are used should be formatted as follows: {sfn|McGann|McGann|p=}

Fixed.

• The same fix applies to the book written by LagetLagetCazabanMontgermont: {sfn|Laget|Laget|Cazaban|Montgermont|p=}

Fixed.

• Also, all of the sfn templates for Van Gucht's 2015 book should not have the underdash character (_) in it

I actually had to figure out how to do that, but it appears to have worked. You never stop learning.

Those are the many points that I found in my read-through. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 12:18, 7 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

@MWright96: Thank you for the review! Have addressed all points, some are still up for debate, looking forward to your comments! Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:57, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

• @Zwerg Nase: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:48, 15 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Thank you! Zwerg Nase (talk) 07:12, 16 March 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]