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This review is transcluded from Talk:Charles Trotter/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 17:08, 21 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• Per WP:LEADCITE, move the exact date of death to that section in the prose, and then remove the citation in the lead
• Find links for fullbore and smallbore, as those aren't terms that are gonna be familiar to everyone.
• Per MOS:OVERLINK, you don't need to link Egypt
• Specify that the 1956 and 1960 events are Olympics

Early life

• "twelve pounds in cash—all the money that was in the house at that time" - Close paraphrasing
• "an all-boys public school, where he started shooting, and represented the school at the schools' championships at Bisley three times" - Not finding where this is in the source
• Put his full name somewhere in the body

Life and career

• "Once the war was over, Trotter, then a Captain, commanded a group of German Prisoners of War in the Canal Zone in Egypt charged with constructing and maintaining the water supply and filtration plants" - More close paraphrasing
• "After leaving school, Trotter joined the Royal Engineers with whom he served during the Second World War" - More specific date needed
• We need more details about his wartime service
• "Trotter then established a photography business in Nairobi, Kenya from 1951 to 1962" - Close paraphrasing
• Blue Ribbon Award is the wrong link, as that's an award specific to Japanese film
• "a nature film about baboons which won a Blue Ribbon Award for photography" - Yet more close paraphrasing
• "He returned to London in the early 1960s, before moving to Fleet, Hampshire where he joined the Royal Aircraft Establishment at Farnborough and later Aberporth, Wales as a photographer." - Also close paraphrasing
• "On 15 February 1963, Trotter married his wife, Joan Peary" - The NRA source says 1962, and the other source is unreliable
• "The two were involved in a head-on car collision in 1965, which rendered both disabled." - Unclear what disabled means here, as he was clearly still mobile
• "He was named Scottish Champion in 1972" - Way to vague. More information needed
• "In doing so, Trotter became only the second Guernseyman to win the competition, and he remains the island's most recent winner" - Source is from 2004, potentially outdated.
• What does the overly-long block quote add? It looks to be a touch excessive.
• " Trotter was voted as the island's Sportsman of the Year and was asked by the Guernsey Postal Services to be featured on one of its stamps in a series depicting disability in sport" - Close paraphrasing
• "He fired twenty times for Guernsey in the Kolapore, and represented Scotland, the Channel Islands and Guernsey in the Mackinnon" - Close paraphrasing
• "winning a bronze medal in the Fullbore Rifle event in the 1982 edition held in Brisbane, Australia." - Source doesn't state it was in Brisbane.
• " competing a number of times in the Masters and Nordic Championships" - 11 words in a row is too much close paraphrasing here
• "made his own foresight rings; as he got older they got thinner until eventually he made them out of fuse wir" - Close paraphrasing
• What's a foresight ring?
• "Trotter's substantial collection of shooting silver and memorabilia is held in an exhibit in Castle Cornet" - Can't find this on the page it's supposedly on.
• "After his death, Trotter's ashes were scattered at Bisley at the beginning of the 2004 Imperial Meeting" - Source just indicates this was planned (had not yet occurred at time of source publishment), so this fails verification

Images

• Fair use claim is okay, as the subject is deceased, so getting a new free image is impossible.

References

• The to-lo.com source does not appear to be an RS in any way.
• Ref 5 is not working for me
• Ref 6 is not working for me
• Rootsweb is not a reliable source.
• Blurb, Incorporated is a self-publishing service, so that source probably fails WP:SPS.

Ready Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing. Close paraphrasing to the extent used in this article is a copyright violation. Between this and a large proportion of the sources being unreliable, this is going to have to be quick-failed. Hog Farm _Bacon 18:47, 21 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]