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- Lead
- "alongside Deuce Shade, and they won the OVW Southern Tag Team Championship on three occasions." -> "alongside Deuce Shade. Together, the pair won the OVW Southern Tag Team championship on three occasions."
- "were known as the group The Throw-Backs and later The Untouchables." -> "were known as "The Throw-Backs" and later as "The Untouchables."
- the group were called up - "were" -> "was"
- "where the team went a name change to Deuce 'n Domino." -> "where the team's name was changed to "Deuce 'n Domino."
- "They made their debut in January 2007." - "The pair made their debut in January 2007 where they *fill in blank here*..."
- Okay, but why fill in the blank? What's needed?
- Either "defeated X" or "in Jan 07 on Show Y"
- "After losing the title in August 2007, the group disbanded in June 2008, after a series of losses." - That doesn't flow right. Try "The team lost the title in August 2007 at (wherever they lost it) to (whoever they lost it to). The group disbanded in June 2008, after a series of losses."
- The lead shouldn't give anything away.
- Prose
- Please try to find something, anything about his personal/early life before wrestling and life outside of wrestling.
- There's nothing available.
- Move ref 4 to the end of the sentence
- "During their time together, they went an image change, including changing their name to "The Untouchables" and dropping Dice, Shade, and Pie from their respective names." - "During their time together they would undergo an image change, including changing the group's name to "The Untouchables" and dropping Dice, Shade, and Pie from their respective names."
- "The team would become OVW Southern Tag Team Champions after Deuce defeated Mike Mizanin on March 19 to win the titles for the team." -> "On March 19, Deuce defeated Mike Mizanin to win the OVW Southern Tag Team Championship for the team." - but was this a singles or tag team match?
- It was a singles match. I added some info. to it.
- "The feud culminated in a street fight between the two teams." - which who won?
- "the team went a name change to "Deuce 'n Domino"." - "the team's name was changed again, this time to "Deuce 'n Domino."
- "They debuted on the January 19, 2007 episode, where they were placed in a tag team match," - against whom?
- "At the June event, Vengeance: Night of Champions, after insulting former Tag Team Champions Tony Garea and Rick Martel, Deuce 'n Domino defeated Sgt. Slaughter and "Superfly" Jimmy Snuka to retain their title.[14]" - I don't think that's very notable.. it has nothing to do with the rest of their tag team career, being that it wasn't a long feud or notable match.
- Wikilink need to go on "orbit bone socket"
- "Deuce n' Domino later engaged in a rivalry with Batista, and Ric Flair.[16][17][18] On the August 31 episode of SmackDown!, he and Deuce lost their tag team championship to Matt Hardy and the reigning United States Champion Montel Vontavious Porter." - None of this is put together well. You mention there was a rivalry with Batista and Flair, but don't talk about it any more. Try to add some more information on that feud. The sentences also don't flow right, try to make the second sentence look like it's coming after the first one... if that makes sense. One more thing: start the first sentence with "After coming back from his injury, Deuce 'n Domino engaged in...."
- The were short feuds, really.
- [20][21][22][23] - more than 3 references next to one sentence is too much.
- You want me to remove them?
- Remove one of them. Keep the three best ones.
- I removed a WrestleView one.
- ""At WrestleMania XXIV in March, the team participated in a 24-man Interpromotional Battle Royal, in which the winner would face then ECW Champion Chavo Guerrero later that night. Deuce 'n Domino, however, did not win the match.[29]" - note that they competed as singles competitors, not as a tag team.
- Do you have a suggestion? I can't think of anything.
- "At WrestleMania XXIV in March, Deuce and Domino competed as singles competitors in a 24-man Interpromotional Battle Royal, in which the winner would face then ECW Champion Chavo Guerrero later that night; however, neither was able to win the match.[29]"
- "On the May 23 episode of SmackDown, Deuce 'n Domino parted ways with Cherry and replaced her with WWE Diva Maryse.[30]" - "parted ways with Cherry; WWE Diva Maryse would take over as the team's on-screen manager."
- Crack 'em in da Mouth. - wikilink?
- "—a wrestler who consistently loses to make his opponents look stronger—" - remove this
- I removed "jobber", since it's jargon, along with the sentence.
- Almost nothing in the "In wrestling" section is sourced... why?
- Source for "OTW Delaware Valley Championship (3 times)"?
- Couldn't find one.
- I don't think it should be included if you can't find a source. If there's no source, where was the information from in the first place?
- I removed it. IDK, really. When I started working on the article, those title mentions where there. I looked for sources, wasn't successful in finding anything related to it.
- Source for "WXW Tag Team Championship (1 time) – with Jake Bishop"?
- Source for "WWA Heavyweight Championship (1 time)"?
- If there are leftover images, they should go in the In wrestling or CAA sections. Since there's only one image of the pair, you should move it up into the prose.
- I would rather leave the image where it is.
- Why? Having image in the prose gives the article a better look, which attracts more readers.