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Reviewer: SL93 (talk · contribs) 03:25, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will take care of the GA review.

• I'm not sure why the Summary section is titled as it is. Plot would be a more suitable section title.

Y It's just something that was already there when I rewrote the section. Fixed.

• "Social Studies assignment" - At least in the United States where this book was published, the name of the course is social studies - so "social studies assignment".

Y Fixed.

• "his mother punishes him with no TV or video games." TV should be changed to television.

Y Changed to your wording below.

• "his mother punishes him with no TV or video games" seems to be awkward phrasing. Beyond my earlier point of TV needing to be spelled out as television, I would suggest something else for phrasing such as "his mother punishes him by not allowing him to watch television or play video games."

Y Fixed.

• "Greg is unable to play outside due to a rivalry between groups on his street: those who live on the straight Lower Surrey Street or the slanted Upper Surrey Street." - Why is there a rivalry between the two groups and why does the shape of the streets matter?

YGreg complains that he has to walk longer and uphill to get to his house, and the Lower Surrey Street students are much more territorial and don't like when people go on their part of the street. I can't think of a more concise way to word this without too much unneeded detail.

• "Greg is frustrated at school when his classmates are unsanitary, and struggles with the cold weather." - How are the students unsanitary?

Y They don't cover their coughs.

• "However, Greg and Rowley are saved when they come across Greg's father." How did they come across Greg's father?

YThey run out of the woods and Greg's dad is just already there in his car. It's not really explained in the book.

• "After some Whirley Street people and the Mingo Kids get involved" How do the Mingo kids get involved?

YSeems to likely be coincidence, they just walk out of the woods at the same time the snowball fight is happening.

• "Greg is glad that he survived the snowball fight, but accepts that he cannot be a hero." The hero part came from nowhere. There is no indication that Greg even wanted to be a hero.

Y This is meant to connect to some minor tangent near the beginning of the book. I removed it, but I think there needs to be a more conclusive closing statement.

• It is unclear who Rowley is to people who are unfamiliar with the series.

Y Fixed.

• According to Kinney, The Meltdown is a "war book." - Both references at the end of the sentence state that quote, but only one of those references is needed for that sentence.

I don't think it hurts to have two citations here, it shows that he used this specific description more than once.

Y I guess the extra verification is fine. Thanks for your thoughts. SL93 (talk) 20:19, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

• "landing on one of 10 activities" - I would suggest rephrasing that part to "which would land on one of 10 activities"

Y Fixed. I think having two "would"s so close it a bit odd, though.

• "In total, 7000 tickets were sold for the show." The comma is missing (7,000 tickets).

Y Fixed.

• "book publishing company Abrams used social media posts and local television commercials" - How did the publishing company become involved with promotion? I noticed that Abrams isn't listed as one of the book's publishers.
  • I see that Amulet Books is an imprint of Abrams Books. Would you be able to add that information to that section? It isn't obvious until a reader clicks on the wikilink for Amulet Books. SL93 (talk) 03:52, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Y Cleared this up.

• "from bus" - "from a bus".

Y Fixed.

• "local television commercials" - What do you mean by local? Where were the commercials aired?

Y The source didn't really elaborate on these, so I removed it.

• The infobox image needs the sections "Not replaceable with free media because" and "Respect for commercial opportunities" filled out.

Y Added some more.

Thank you for this review! I think it just needs a bit more for the plot section, and then it'll be good. Scrooge200 (talk) 20:11, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I can wait until you add more to the plot to where you think it is acceptable. SL93 (talk) 20:19, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Scrooge200 Just in case, this is a reminder that you have 4 days to change the plot (per the 7 day time limit). I personally think that the plot is fine for GA as it currently is per your explanations though. SL93 (talk) 19:44, 13 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Well, you're still editing and the plot is fine so I will approve this as a Good Article. If you feel that the plot needs more content, you are still free to do so. SL93 (talk) 01:52, 16 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

1. Well written?:

Prose quality:

Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

References to sources:

Citations to reliable sources, where required:

No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:

Major aspects:

Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions: SL93 (talk) 01:52, 16 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, I was planning to give this a bit more work, but I was busy with school. Still, thank you for passing this article! Scrooge200 (talk) 05:59, 16 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]