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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 16:58, 18 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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 Done 11Jorn leave a message 19:13, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Resolved comments

  • Link music critics
  • produced by André Betts. → You've already said his name in the first paragraph, so only use his surname from that point on.
  • peaking at number two on the Billboard 200 and in the United Kingdom → Instead of mixing a chart and country, either write: on the US Billboard 200 and the UK Album Chart or in the United States and the United Kingdom.
  • I'd write where it topped the charts first, not last.
  • erotic thriller → Link thriller and write that it is a film.
  • a dancer doing topless → This doesn't make sense. Re-word it.
 Done 11Jorn leave a message 19:13, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Resolved comments

  • 2The first two project" → I think project is mean't to be projects?
  • "and co-produce" → produced?
  • "(1990), " → (1991) and. You only list two songs, so use and to link the first to the second. You only use a comma if it is for example three: one, two and three.
  • Have you got sources or credits to support that he co-wrote those songs two songs?
  • "In 1992, Madonna collaborated with Pettibone on "This Used to Be My Playground", the soundtrack of the film A League of Their Own, in which Madonna had role as Mae Mordabito, a baseball player on an all-women's team." → Source for the film info?

Development

"on his book" → in his book "According to record producer Shep Pettibone" → You said Shep Pettibone in the Background section. You only use their full name once, from then on, you refer to him or her by their surname only. Only link them the first time too.

Music structure and lyrics

Resolved comments

  • "It uses uses" → I think you can spot what needs to be cut :)

Critical reception

Chart performance

Singles

Resolved comments

  • If you are linking singles for the second/third time by this section, then they need to be unlinked. Only ever link the first instance of something. I can see repeat linking here of singles. And for Sex.
  • Audio file is fine.

Promotion

Resolved comments

  • "along the song" → You mean alongside the song?

Legacy

Resolved comments

  • Unlink Slant Magazine. Second instance.
  • "Upon the title track's release, the Vatican banned Madonna from entering the state and her music was banned on its radio stations." → Source?
  • What track are you talking about in the second paragraph?

Track listing

Credits and personnel

Charts and certifications

Resolved comments

  • I've done a slight c/e so the tables conform with WP:ACCESS
  • You don't need to link countries in the Certifications table. Already link in the Charts table. Also, perhaps provide the provider like [1].

References

Here are more mistakes:

Summary

Quite a lot to do. References need work. I won't fail the article, I'll put on hold for 7 days. But to ensure that I don't fail "American Life (song)" for the same mistakes, please apply these comments and make a c/e of "American Life". I don't want to have to spend time repeating comments I've made here! :-). Aaron • You Da One 16:13, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, thanks. 11Jorn leave a message 21:38, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
You haven't done most of the things I asked. I know I said I wouldn't fail the article, but I would have thought you would have actually done what I asked. You haven't gone through the references or provided sources for things which were ambiguous. You need go right through the article, read things out loud to yourself, and spend time making sure everything is sourced and cited where appropriate, and that your references are correct and consistent. Sorry but I'm failing the article. Please make sure you take note of what I have written and asked and apply it to "American Life (song)", otherwise that could have the same result. Aaron • You Da One 16:50, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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