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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:19, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• What's Jones' rank?

Development

• Link centreline to Centerline (nautical)

Construction and career

• What type of ship was Lark?
• Link fire control to Fire-control system
• Give the exact date that the Amphion incident happened
• The time range from the Amphion explosion (based on sinking date in our article on Amphion) to the August 26 order on the patrol date is not exactly a fortnight, so include a qualification that the range is approximate
• Give the exact date of the Heligoland Bight scrap. I would have assumed 26 August from the article, but it appears to have been on 28 August.

References

• Do Parkes and Prendergast and the Naval Staff Monograph have OCLCs?

Other than that, it seems to meet all the GA criteria. I'm a non-expert on this subject, so Sturmvogel 66 or someone might have further comments, but once these get addressed, I'm comfortable passing this one for GA. Gonna place on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 21:35, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for a rigorous review and excellent suggestions for improvements. I do not have an OCLC for Parkes and Prendergast so I have changed the reference to the 1969 reprint which does. All the other changes have been made. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 00:43, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Simongraham: - Just got one question. Are the page numbers the same for the two editions? Getting the page numbers correct is much more important than the OCLC in my view, so if you can't verify the 1969 page number, just go with the 1919 version with no OCLC. Hog Farm _Bacon 03:52, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: - No problem. The ship is on the same page in both. simongraham (talk) 01:04, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I'm gonna pass this one now. Hog Farm _Bacon 01:14, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]