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Reviewer: Valereee (talk · contribs) 22:21, 23 November 2019 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Will do this last | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | Will need to expand the lead once we're satisfied with 3A. I suspect there are MOS:LAYOUT issues we'll need to deal with; that's not a strong suit of mine, so you may want to go read over that, too -- look for information about how text and sections interact with images, in particular. Also foreign words -- I'm thinking we may need to italicize only the first time? Or maybe only the first time, as long as we translate or explain it that time? I'm guessing there's a MOS for that, too; I'll look for it, but you see if you can find it too. | |
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Should citation 10 be in the explanatory notes section, for consistency? | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | There are several assertions that don't have a citation, weren't in the first source in that paragraph, and I can't get to the second source to check if they're there. Are those from that book? Can we add the page numbers, since it's a book?
ETA: sources #4 and #19 appear to be blogs. None of the assertions are controversial, but in the case where one of these is an additional support rather than the only support or the best-worded support, we should probably just remove it. And if it's the only support, we should probably find a better source if there is one. If there isn't but it's information that is simply explanatory and the best explanation we're finding, I don't have a problem keeping it. | |
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | Is there a reason you've got the fourth name for the item in a separate sentence? Is kotobuki tamagoyaki yet another name for the pan, I'm seeing that in a google search, I'm actually wondering if we need a section on the name for the pan since there seem to be many?
Uses section should probably be Use, unless there's another use for the pan other than making the tamagoyaki? Section off the information about the omelet's uses, as separate from the pan's use. Uses of the omelet probably should include Golden Thread Eggs, per the feldner source, maybe others? Kinshi Tamako, is that another name for the golden trhead eggs? | |
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | Is there a reason for the see also to Tava? | |
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | ||
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | There are some photos of the pan in use at https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Category:Tamago_yaki_cooking | |
7. Overall assessment. |
Starting review --valereee (talk) 22:21, 23 November 2019 (UTC)