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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 18:10, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
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line in Queens, New York City, United States,"United States" feels out of place here.
via that street [...] along that streetObliterate.
Service on the route that became the Q27 serviceDelete the second "service"
Service on the route that became the Q27 started in October 1928 by the Z & M Coach CorporationThis should be "was started".
[...] as part of Zone B (Flushing and Northern Queens).Expand on this; elaborate on the division of NYC into these zones.
New York City grantedWhile technically correct, this makes it sounds like the whole city was in on the granting.
its former routes being turned over to city operationand its former routes were turned over to city operation.
that New York City TransitReplace with "the NYCTA"
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