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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 22:06, 8 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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I have a question about one source and a bunch of copy changes. 7-day hold to A person in Georgia. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:06, 8 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

• That's A person in Georgia (flubbed the username). Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:06, 8 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Sammi Brie: All done. A person in Georgia (talk) 12:50, 14 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes[edit]

• Gus's men smuggle Nacho into the U.S. and Mike administers a beating so it appears Nacho was captured. Comma after "U.S.": User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences.
• He then bolsters his confession by revealing that he also tried to kill Hector by switching his angina medication for a placebo, but that Gus saved him. I'd remove the last "that"
• him "on the run and getting out of jams." Should be period outside of quotation for a sentence fragment.
• Change the commas in this sentence to their placings here: Smith filmed a take of Mando without the effect and, two weeks later, projected the shot onto a screen, where they could adjust where the glass was and how it was fractured.
• Its thickness made it difficult for Mando to submerge so he had to hold onto horizontal scaffolding poles nearby to pull himself under. Add comma after "submerge" to aid reading.
• The episode's cold open was shot simultaneously with the oil tanker scene on a different soundstage where they Add a comma after soundstage
• Cantu was not given access to the season's scripts so while filming Add commas before and after "so"
• "for their Gods to bring rain" should be lowercase "gods"
• Mando said he "realized that this was not an f-you speech, this was a speech that is filled with the underlying values and integrity of who Nacho really is, and where he'd like to see his community go." period outside quote
• where Gob gets married after "a series of escalating dares." period outside quote
• Smith described it as "building a little elevator shaft for a camera body in this small, triangular hole that ran the length of the stairwell." period outside quote
• David Segal of The New York Times saluted Smith's screenplay and direction and the production design, and similarly compared Nacho's life to that of Jesse's, both criminals who made "some terrible life choices" and were "over-punished for them", adding, "It would have been great to see more of this stellar actor, but if you must leave a show, a more dramatic and affecting end is hard to imagine." This sentence needs a split. Maybe... David Segal of The New York Times saluted Smith's screenplay and direction and the production design. He similarly compared Nacho's life to that of Jesse's—both criminals who made "some terrible life choices" and were "over-punished for them"—adding, "It would have been great to see more of this stellar actor, but if you must leave a show, a more dramatic and affecting end is hard to imagine."
  • All  Done A person in Georgia (talk) 12:47, 14 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Other items[edit]

• What makes the Pete Peppers video a reliable source?
  • Removed. A person in Georgia (talk) 12:50, 14 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Earwig flags quotes and unavoidable formulations... No issues.
• Two images are freely licensed; the poster has an NFUR. All have alt text.
• References are archived.