A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
I'm more curious than anything, "Here comes the Naz" - what was that supposed to mean? Is Naz slang for something? Can this be clarified or even wikilinked?
"Here comes the Naz" was a line from a well-known sketch by hipster comic Lord Buckley - "the Naz" meaning Jesus - which is probably its derivation here - but I have no source for that. Ghmyrtle (talk) 13:27, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Ghmyrtle is spot on and it's in Hanson's book, so I've added it as a footnote. Ritchie333(talk)(cont) 17:15, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Is there any particular reason why Leoš Janáček is piped to Janáček (same story with Antonín Dvořák), and why "Sinfonietta" isn't wikilinked to Sinfonietta (Janáček)? "Sinfonietta" just in brackets isn't particularly helpful to people unfamiliar with this artist. As in I wasn't clear that that was were the extract was from by how you've worded the article, I was confused and clicked on the artist link to understand what that meant.
Why is America wikilinked in the fourth paragraph of the "Early career" sub-section, when the terms America and US both appear prior to this?
Probably something another editor did that I forgot to fix. Per WP:OVERLINK this shouldn't be in there. Ritchie333(talk)(cont) 17:03, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"which by all accounts was a disaster" - can exactly what made this a disaster be clarified in any useful way to the reader?
Clarified a bit. Apparently the equipment was all third rate, such as running the PA from a single broken plug in a shed. Ritchie333(talk)(cont) 17:03, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1969, Emerson performed as a session player for" - up to you, but I don't see any need for this to be a one sentence paragraph. Do you think you can merge it with either the above or below paragraphs?
70% of your citations are to Hanson, which I don't think is ideal, but i'm guessing that's the only book that focuses entirely on the band, and many other reliable sources are used, so I think this is acceptable.
Yes, I've been a little uncomfortable myself, but as you speculate, this is the only officially authorised biography of the band. It drew on back issues of NME and Melody Maker that are now hard to find and featured fresh interviews from everyone except Keith Emerson. It achieved good reviews and received praise for finally filling gaps in the narrative. More info here. Ritchie333(talk)(cont) 17:03, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I've been told during several reviews that if you have a both a 'Notes' and 'Bibliography' section, all books should be placed in the bibliography, even if they are only used once. I'm not sure if there is an official guideline on this, so i'm not going to make you do it, but just something to keep in mind. Feel free to let me know if there is a guideline on this that you know about.
I don't think there is but it's something I've got into the habit of doing recently, so I've ((sfn))'ed all these. Ritchie333(talk)(cont) 17:03, 28 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]