Hi! I will add my comments over the next few days. Sainsf<^>Feel at home 05:39, 28 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
General
A lot of duplicate links in the latter part of the article. You can remove them yourself using this tool. Please note that at some places the links may be necessary, for instance if the last link was quite a while ago.
Bold is generally not used in the article except in the first few lines of the lead.
The tone is positive overall, has there never been any controversy surrounding the university?
Lead
Use convert template for acres
I think "recognizable" is redundant
The lead generally has three to four paras for articles of this length
Citations are generally excluded from the lead unless you state something controversial. All facts in the lead should also be mentioned and cited in the main article, please check that.
Foundations
Link Holy Cross at first mention
Fr. Sorin arrived on the site... additions to the campus Source?
Early history
Say either Sorin or Fr. Sorin
With each new president... housed in the Main Building Source?
a library collection was started by Father Lemonnier. By 1879 it had grown to ten thousand volumes that were housed in the Main Building. Better add in the first line that the library was housed in the Main Building, and remove "were housed in the Main Building" from the second line
and the school closed immediately Better replace "and the" by a semicolon
The university founder, Fr. Sorin and the president comma after Sorin
on the 17th of May May 17, as per the MOS
Around the time of the fire, a music hall was opened. Eventually becoming known as Washington Hall, it hosted plays and musical acts put on by the school May be combined. "Eventually becoming known as" sounds a bit clumsy
Growth
William J. Hoynes (1846–1919) No need to mention these years here. Same for Rev. Zahm
into a great university Were these Zahm's words?
erecting buildings and added added→adding
His term was not renewed because of fears By whom? Whose fear?
The university continued to expand and add new residence halls and buildings with each subsequent president. Source?
By contrast, the Jesuit colleges, bastions of academic conservatism, were reluctant to move to a system of electives. Their graduates were shut out of Harvard Law School for that reason. Combine
Source for the 4th para?
listen to the games on the radio listen→listened
Please add a few words on KKK, though it is wikilinked
Expansion in the 1930s and 1940s
vice-president No hyphen, you say "vice president" elsewhere
Link CSC at first mention in the article
Cavanaugh also presided over the construction...university's governance and development Source? Avoid the repetition of "Cavanaugh also"
Hesburgh era
In 1972 the first woman to graduate was Angela Sienko, who earned a bachelor's degree in marketing Rephrase as "In 1972, Angela Sienko, who earned a bachelor's degree in marketing, became the first woman graduate from the university."
Recent history
Fix the "when?" template
Since 2005 You can combine this with the next line by saying "Since July 1, 2005"
Campus
Italics for "Travel+Life"
Buildings and architecture
Source for the 2nd para?
after a $3.5 million renovation and transformed into the all-ages student hang-out that currently exists. Legends is made up of two parts: The Restaurant and Alehouse and the nightclub. Place ref. 67 at the end of this line if it is the source or add a source for this
Convert templates for "83,000 square feet" and "100 yards"
Environmental sustainability
The university also houses the Kroc Institute for International Peace Studies. Father Gustavo Gutierrez, the founder of Liberation Theology is a current faculty member. Source? When is "current"?
Global Gateways
Better not use bold, present the information as a bulleted list.
Are all points sourced?
Organization and administration
Is it "Fellows" or "Fellows"?
The Fellows are a group of ... by that body. Source?
The current is Fr. John I. Jenkins who was elected in 2005. Repetition from an earlier section
The provost of the university, as of 2012 is Thomas Burish; he oversees academic functions Rephrase as "As of 2012, the provost of the university, who oversees academic functions, is Thomas Burish."
Colleges
Better not use bold, present the information as a bulleted list.
It also awards the renowned annual Driehaus Architecture Prize. Source?
Graduate and professional schools
Source for where Indiana University medical students...medical campus at IUPUI?
Admissions
Admitted students came from...24% in science, and 3% in architecture. Source?
Rankings
What is "College Factual"?
Is "payscale.com" reliable? What exactly is it?
Science
Father John Augustine Zahm (1851–1921) The years are a repetition
and continues now partly through a partnership in the Joint Institute for Nuclear Astrophysics. Source?
Humanities
Influenced by Jacques Maritain, John U. Nef Who are they?
generations of undergraduates to Gabriel Marcel "Gabriel...Hopkins to generations of undergraduates"
Religious life
The last line of the 1st para and the rest of the section is unsourced
Athletics
The official colors of Notre Dame are Navy Blue and Gold Rush Why is it not "navy blue and gold rush"?
Neither the university nor its athletic department has ever commented on this assertion. Source?
Football
Today the team competes in Notre Dame Stadium When is "today"?
Men's basketball
The men's basketball team has over 1,600 wins As of when?
The team is coached by Mike Brey, who, as of the 2014–15 season...Fighting Irish team since 1908-09. Source?
Other sports
The women's swimming and diving team holds the Big East record As of when?
Music
The first para is full of short sentences
Sources for 2nd and 4th paras?
The Internationally recognized "internationally"?
What is "Glee"?
Alumni
A number of university heads are alumni Rephrase as "Alumni include a number of university heads"
Whom do you introduce (professional boxer Mike Lee) and whom do you not (Mike Golic) ?
Ref. 5, 9, 146, 172, 187, 188, 263 need formatting
Date formats need to be consistent
The publisher parameter shows problem in ref. 241
Page range for ref. 145 (check for similar book sources)
Ref. 2 is actually a note
Don't put urls in the publisher parameter, give proper names
That should be all. Putting on hold for 7 days. Sainsf(talk·contribs) 16:32, 13 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I am currently reviewing point by point your comments and making appropriate corrections. I will also address specific points. Eccekevin (talk) 14:44, 18 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the update. I look forward to improvements. Please mention the changes made and comments, if any, on the review page. Sainsf(talk·contribs) 14:48, 18 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
Citations are generally excluded from the lead unless you state something controversial. All facts in the lead should also be mentioned and cited in the main article, please check that. - I left some citations, especially those on rankings and programs, since they have been source of contention in the past.
Graduate and professional schools
Should we keep bold font here? For example, for Notre Dame Law School and other institutions. It would make sense since they are important institutions with a different page dedicated to it.
Rankings
Is "payscale.com" reliable? What exactly is it? - I added the wikilink
Athletics
Neither the university nor its athletic department has ever commented on this assertion. Source? - I removed the unsourced part. The whole discussion on Muscular Christianity seems useless to me, but I won't touch it.
Football
Today the team competes in Notre Dame Stadium When is "today"?
Men's basketball
The men's basketball team has over 1,600 wins As of when?
The team is coached by Mike Brey, who, as of the 2014–15 season...Fighting Irish team since 1908-09. Source?
-still to review-
Music
The first para is full of short sentences
Sources for 2nd and 4th paras?
The Internationally recognized "internationally"?
What is "Glee"?
Alumni
A number of university heads are alumni Rephrase as "Alumni include a number of university heads"
Whom do you introduce (professional boxer Mike Lee) and whom do you not (Mike Golic) ?
Ref. 5, 9, 146, 172, 187, 188, 263 need formatting
Date formats need to be consistent
The publisher parameter shows problem in ref. 241
Page range for ref. 145 (check for similar book sources)
Ref. 2 is actually a note
Don't put urls in the publisher parameter, give proper names
@Eccekevin: You need not copy my comments on the same page, it would be easier if you reply right under the comments I originally posted. Sainsf(talk·contribs) 17:46, 18 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing note : The nominator has been away since 18 May and two weeks have passed since their last response. This nomination will have to be failed for now due to inactivity, but I hope the issues noted here and in the previous reviews will soon be resolved and this will be renominated. Good luck with this. Sainsf(talk·contribs) 11:06, 1 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]