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Great job with your development of Immigrant health care in the United States in your sandbox! You asked me to review this, and I will. Can you help a bit more, and also, can you get the word out to others?
Wikipedia uses a "track changes" system, which means that when you edit Wikipedia, reviewers can see how the article was before, and how it is after. If I did "track changes" on your content then I could see what you added, and comment on that. Otherwise I have to read the entire article and I cannot tell what is old and what is new. In your sandbox you seem to have mixed old and new content, and I think you are editing it offline, offwiki, so I cannot apply track changes.
Your content seems like a mix of new and old content in many edits of your sandbox history. If old and new are mixed, then I have trouble finding what you want me to review.
I could be misunderstanding what is happening here, so correct me if I am in error. If this is what is happening, then for the next step, can you edit the live article one section at a time? If you do that, then I can see exactly what you changed in any sentence or section. Thanks. Blue Rasberry (talk) 12:32, 13 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I understand! Thank you for your reply! I've made a lot of edits that are definitely kind of integrated into the existing article and I'm currently planning some improvements, so it can definitely be hard to discern what is mine or not. I'll re-do the edits as soon as I can. Thank you again! Amymu123 (talk) 17:19, 17 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Can you explain more about your next steps? You have developed content. Will you add this to Immigrant health care in the United States? If so, when? It is a bit challenging for me to compare the original text to your draft, but I could easily review changes which you made to the live Wikipedia article. If you will edit the article then I would prefer to review then. If you need another response then be direct in asking exactly what I should examine and how. Thanks. Blue Rasberry (talk) 20:42, 18 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Excuse me, none of my responses till now have made any sense. I was looking at the incorrect article somehow. You have extensively edited the live article Immigrant health care in the United States as I see in the history. I will post feedback on that article's talk page. I apologize for my confusion - this was nothing to do with you, who communicated clearly. Blue Rasberry (talk) 22:26, 18 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Hi Amy! Overall, i think your revisions to the Wikipedia page "Skin Whitening" are great! I particularly like your inclusion of the "history" section, as its absence from the article had a huge impact on the perceived importance of the topic. another thing that i think you did well was including citations after every sentence, as this enhances the credibility of your article. Some things i would suggest that you go back and check are 1) make sure the sections you did not edit are cited appropriately and 2) consider moving/consolidating sections of your article.
Great job overall on your article!
Natsz72 (talk) 22:45, 31 March 2020 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Welcome to Wikipedia! We have compiled some guidance for new healthcare editors:
Please keep the mission of Wikipedia in mind. We provide the public with accepted knowledge, working in a community.
We do that by finding high quality secondary sources and summarizing what they say, giving WP:WEIGHT as they do. Please do not try to build content by synthesizing content based on primary sources.
Please use high-quality, recent, secondary sources for medical content (see WP:MEDRS; for the difference between primary and secondary sources, see the WP:MEDDEF section.) High-quality sources include review articles (which are not the same as peer-reviewed), position statements from nationally and internationally recognized bodies (like CDC, WHO, FDA), and major medical textbooks. Lower-quality sources are typically removed. Please beware of predatory publishers – check the publishers of articles (especially open source articles) at Beall's list.
The ordering of sections typically follows the instructions at WP:MEDMOS. The section above the table of contents is called the WP:LEAD. It summarizes the body. Do not add anything to the lead that is not in the body. Style is covered in MEDMOS as well; we avoid the word "patient" for example.
We don't use terms like "currently", "recently," "now", or "today". See WP:RELTIME.
More generally see WP:MEDHOW, which gives great tips for editing about health -- for example, it provides a way to format citations quickly and easily
Citation details are important:
Be sure to cite the PMID for journal articles and ISBN for books
Please include page numbers when referencing a book or long journal article, and please format citations consistently within an article.
Do not use URLs from your university library that have "proxy" in them: the rest of the world cannot see them.
Reference tags generally go after punctuation, not before; there is no preceding space.
We use very few capital letters (see WP:MOSCAPS) and very little bolding. Only the first word of a heading is usually capitalized.
Common terms are not usually wikilinked; nor are years, dates, or names of countries and major cities. Avoid overlinking!
Never copy and paste from sources; we run detection software on new edits.
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