Nevado del Ruiz

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I've listed this article for peer review because I know it needs some work before becoming featured, and I'd like to identify and fix the issues specifically raised here in order to bring it to FA standards.

Thanks, —Ceran (talk) 00:13, 20 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks to all three of you for responding so swiftly, and I will get to these ASAP. —Ceran (talk) 01:07, 20 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: As requested, here are some suggestions for improvement. I agree with all of the comments above, and think this still has organizational issues.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 16:52, 25 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • I'm just gonna pop in and out. I may not be around to answer questions.
  • What does "numbering" mean "The ash ejected was extremely rich and numbering"
  • Too many sentences start with "it". Actually, almost none should.
  • I saw a tense problem using "is" for a past event.. but gotta run now.
  • Ling.Nut (talk—WP:3IAR) 09:59, 29 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I find it useful to begin at the end and work up. The final sections mention an irrelevant lahar in Nevado del Huila. Seriously consider deleting this, although doing so would leave you with a one-paragraph section, which means reorganization is needed. Why are AFMs mentined in ths article but not in lahar? This article needs major work. Ling.Nut (talk—WP:3IAR) 00:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]