Paul Nobuo Tatsuguchi

It's been more than two years since I tried to really develop a biography article, so, I could really use another set of eyes to ensure I'm doing this correctly. I discovered this story recently while doing Pacific War research and thought that it was a very interesting story. Any comments and critiques are greatly appreciated. Cla68 (talk) 05:29, 8 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ryan4314

• You can probably drop the "(US)" after the United States.

Otherwise, sweet lead. Ryan4314 (talk) 19:35, 10 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

Very good, overall, but a couple of minor things that need fixing:

• In quotes, editorial comments (e.g. "sic") are normally given in square brackets, not parentheses. Is there some reason for the different usage here?
• Extended quotes are sometimes cited at the end of the introductory statement and other times at the end of the quote itself; I'd suggest using a single style.

Other than that, this looks ready to go. Kirill ^(prof) 03:30, 11 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Corrections made. Thank you both for taking the time to review the article and leave comments. Cla68 (talk) 13:06, 11 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]