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I'll be happy to review this. I'll post some initial feedback by the weekend. Thanks to the nominator for improving WP's coverage of baseball. Larry Hockett (Talk) 12:51, 16 September 2020 (UTC
Here is some initial feedback. First, the big stuff. Earwig's Copyvio Detector returns nothing of concern, I don't see any grossly non-neutral language, and the article appears to be stable. I'll leave some feedback section by section.
This strikes me as a lot for a one-paragraph lead. Consider breaking the lead into two paragraphs for readability.
Done, where I thought it was reasonably logical to do so
"currently a free agent" - I know it's common phrasing, but it runs counter to WP:WTW (relative time references).
Added a "as of September 2020" as a qualifier
I am getting sort of mixed messages between the wording in the lead (which refers to him as a free agent) and the and the last sentences of the Later Career section (which refer to at least his MLB career in the past tense). Maybe that wording is just because it seems unlikely that he'll return to MLB. I know we often do not get a big official announcement when a guy retires in the minors, but it would be nice if we could find something that clarifies his status.
@Larry Hockett: - I've changed the last paragraph to be in the present tense, since I can find no announcement of a retirement. It looks like Pounders is not likely to play MLB again, but there's no source stating that outright, so there's no way to clarify status besides in free agency purgatory.
"chose not to play baseball in college" - This suggests that he attended college but was not on the baseball team. As I understand it, he did not enroll at USC or any other college because he was drafted by a professional organization out of HS.
Clarified
If drafted in 2009 and traded to KC in 2011, "playing in the minor leagues for several years" is the wrong wording (less than three certainly isn't several).
Rephrased. I have a bad habit of using "several" to mean anything between 2 and 7 or 8.
Starting in these sections, what I am noticing is that the paragraphs are mostly just collections of stats, transactions, and player of the week mentions. Was there anything written about the subject that tells us other info? Strengths, weaknesses, what pitches he threw well, why he might have struggled when he did? We don't want a ton of quotes, but right now I am having a hard time getting a sense of what others thought about Pounders. The Rustin Dodd KC Star article has at least a quote about how Pounders felt like the Pirates gave up on him. There's a Pittsburgh Post Gazette article ("The school of hard knocks", 7/15/2010 - [1]) that has some info on Pounders and a couple of other prospects.
The Pittsburgh Post Gazette piece is a "publisher's extra" clipping, so I can't access it without it a subscription. However, I did apply for newspapers.com access at WP:LIBRARY a couple days ago, so maybe I'll get approved for that. Hog FarmBacon01:14, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I'm trying to see what else I can find. I found a statement about the Mets' former manager about his slider having improvement, so I've added that. Most of what I'm finding is in sports blogs, mostly because the mainstream sources don't give a whole lot of "this guy is struggling" analysis, and when you have a 8+ ERA, you don't get much intention. I'm still trying to find more. Hog FarmBacon01:31, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I apparently kept forgetting his name was Pounders, not Pounder
"Over the course of a career-high 134 innings" - "over the course of" is unnecessarily wordy. I don't think it hurts once or twice, but this phrase appears six times in this relatively short entry.
Removed "the course of" here, and I've removed the whole phrase towards the end of the article when I changed the tense
"He also named the Carolina League pitcher" - was named
Done
How did the 2015 national team do in the tournament?
Second. Added.
"in a 3–8 loss to the Toronto Blue Jays" - In North American sports like baseball, it is more common to list the higher score first ("an 8-3 loss").
"he also had 4–2 record, a 8.47 career ERA" - a 4-2 record, an 8.47 career ERA
Done
Again, I think the biggest thing is just that we need more than stats and transactions. If you're able to find more non-statistical information on Pounders, I'll take another quick look at the prose once you add that. Larry Hockett (Talk) 22:28, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Let me take a look this weekend. It's my goal to work with you, not against you, so I'll see if I can add a bit from newspapers.com or other places. Larry Hockett (Talk) 05:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Larry Hockett: - My application for Wikipedia Library newspapers.com finally went through. I've added some material from the Post-Gazette source you found, another brief reference from the same paper earlier that year, and a bit from him and his manager after his first loss. There's not a whole lot out here about this guy, but I'll keep looking. Hog FarmBacon03:49, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Hog Farm, thank you for your patience on this. I didn't mean to leave you hanging. I've added a little bit to what you've added and I'm pretty satisfied that we have a narrative that reads as more than a series of stat lines. Good work. I'd like to take one more look through the entry, especially to spot check the sourcing. Since it is already late here, I hope to accomplish this (and promote the article, barring any big problems) by tomorrow evening. I didn't mean to turn this into a never-ending GA review, and I thank you for hanging in there and using your WP Library subscription to take the entry up a notch. Larry Hockett (Talk) 03:51, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]