One thing I keep noting in your articles is that you sometimes spell the drivers' full names out after the first instance. It's best to avoid this.
Hmm, I always try to keep the prose flowing, with full names often in new sections, to make it a little easier for readers who might not read the entire article... Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:25, 17 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The first mention of team-mate should be unhyphened as is seen in the rest of the article for consistency.
"Max Verstappen won the race upon his debut for his new team Red Bull, having swapped his Toro Rosso seat with Daniil Kvyat ahead of the race." - try to avoid repetition of the word "race"; in the second instance it should be "event".
"two ninety-minute practice sessions" -ninety-minute should be spelt in number form per MOS:NUMBERS for consistency with high-value numbers as is seen in the article.
Done
"The Mercedes of Rosberg and Hamilton followed," - This may sound better: "Mercedes teammates Rosberg and Hamilton followed,"
Done
"Force India's Sergio Pérez managed only nine laps as he spent much of the session in the pits after smoke emerged from the rear of his car." - pits is slang and should be avoided, pit lane is better.
Done
"Upon beginning his preparation laps for qualifying, Rosberg had to come back into the pits," - ditto.