GA Review[edit]

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    Prose problems are down below. After they are all fixed and the discussion on them has finished, I'll re-read and decide if it passes then. It passes most of the MoS. The only problem is fiction and jargon. The problem is some non-fans will wonder if wrestling is fake, real, etc still. A small explanation, not big, just a simple to the pint one in Early life, should slove this problem. State that there are writers, characters are what they are just characters, wrestler use stage names, etc.--WillC 19:20, 16 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    Down below--WillC 19:20, 16 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Down below, close, so very close IMO.--WillC 19:20, 16 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
    Fixed.--WillC 22:17, 27 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    All images seem fine, though more would always be nice.--WillC 06:12, 13 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
I will begin the review later today. This may take a while considering when I review I go deeply in depth to make sure it passes the criteria to the letter.--WillC 07:47, 12 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Note: The "to the letter" comment concerns me. I will assume good faith, though, and trust that this review is not being done out of revenge because the nominator failed one of your GA nominees yesterday. GaryColemanFan (talk) 07:52, 12 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
AGF and all, it's all good in the hood I'm sure :) and hey a really in depth review helps prepare it for Featured Article one day so I welcome all the input you've got. MPJ-DK (talk) 08:31, 12 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Gary it is all cool. I want to get a reputation for in depth and tough reviews. I was planning to review this even before the TNA Title was failed. See Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Oklahoma City bombing/archive1 to see what type of reviews I like to give. I'm just trying to make sure we have the best articles possible. This review will probably last for a good week or so.--WillC 10:57, 12 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Restart: first review

Beginning re-read

Rest of the lead is fine. Fix these and there shouldn't be anymore.--WillC 00:05, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Early life

"Andrés Alejandro Palomeque González was born July 1, 1971 in Villahermosa, Tabasco, Mexico. Palomeque started to get interested in professional wrestling at the age of nine when his father, Juan Francisco Palomeque Torres, took him to his first wrestling event. Later the Palomeque Family moved to Poza Rica where a young Palomeque took up Pentathlon (long jump, high jump, 110 metres hurdles run, shot put, 1500 metres run) in school. He and his brother, César Palomeque, had an interest in Martial Arts and trained together for years. When Palomeque was thirteen years old he began working in a gymnasium where professional wrestlers were trained, initially he paid for the use of the gymnasium by cleaning it after hours. When the family moved back to the Tabasco region he began training under Don Nerio Soto and his brother Delio Soto to become a luchador—the Spanish version of a professional wrestler. Luchadores compete in the Spanish term for professional wrestling lucha libre, which, like American professional wrestling, is a non-competitive sport based on simulated fighting with storylines written by creative teams and matches with predetermined results; the majority of wrestlers wear masks in lucha libre. Don Soto later recollects how he and his family took the young man in and made him part of their family, practically adopting him while he was enrolled in Soto's wrestling school and later as he worked on the local wrestling circuit. Palomeue made his professional wrestling debut in 1987, at the age of 16, under the ring name "Alex Dinamo"."--WillC 00:48, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Specifying that professional wrestling in Mexico is similar to American professional wrestling seems Amerocentric. "American" professional wrestling should not be considered the standard, so the term should just be "professional wrestling". GaryColemanFan (talk) 01:36, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well considering this is the english pedia and this is a spanish subject I thought to add it. Plus some may think that only American wrestling is fake. At times I've thought that Japanense and Mexican wrestling were real, so if a fan like me is confused at times, a non-fan probably will be confused.--WillC 01:42, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
British, Canadian, French, Australian, German, South African...? GaryColemanFan (talk) 02:17, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Frankly I'm not really keen on that version, it makes the logical assumption that Lucha Libre and Pro wrestling are two different things, which it is not. "Delio Soto to become a luchador, or professional wrestler. Professional wrestlers perform in in a non-competitive sport based on simulated fighting with storylines written by creative teams and matches with predetermined results" - Simpler, "country neutral" and does not make a major distinction between wrestling in the US and in Mexico beause it shouldn't, same basics - just a few different traditions, but not enough to imply that it's a different sport. MPJ-DK (talk) 04:25, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
That will work just fine.--WillC 05:05, 24 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Professional wrestling career
Winners
Abismo Negro
Total Nonstop Action Wrestling
Return to AAA
Black Abyss
Outside the ring
Death
In wrestling
Championships and accomplishments
Luchas de apuestas record
References
Further reading
External links
Since this review has gotten so long and the page is so big, I'm going to FAC it. Remove some of the information and give a link like they do in FACs. Unless you have a problem with it?--WillC 14:08, 25 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • erm what? You're going to list it as a Feature Article Candidate? I don't follow here??
  • This page is 96 kilobytes long, so I'm going to remove all the text in the table above. Then I'll link to the verison of the article that exist at the time before removal at the top of the article. It is done in FACs when the pages are too long or the FAC is restarted.--WillC 15:46, 25 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Ah I see, I was more than a little confused ;) I got no problems with that at all. MPJ-DK (talk) 16:10, 25 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]

ALright I've addressed it all, can I just comment on one thing? You, like most WP:PW writers have this "collective inferiority complex" going in regards to sources, you tend to go overboard with what should be cited in an effort to make it look extra good. The rules on sources state "for contentious material", where as your review and loads of comments from WP:PW members seem to be "source every little statement no matter what". Now I got sources, I got the info somewhere after all and I've added them but I would like to point out that you may be on the verge of going a tad overboard — and no I don't have a source for that ;) MPJ-DK (talk) 22:57, 25 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]

The sourcing thing is mainly a priority for FA. Since you said something about that I just thoughth to be hard on the article. I was already going to be hard, but the source statement thing is a bitch at FAC to be honest. As you can see from my recent problems with sourcing.--WillC 23:08, 25 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
That's very true, I had not thought about that - thank you :) and once this review is concluded it probably won't be long before it's put up for FA.  MPJ-DK  (No Drama Wrestling) Talk  10:44, 27 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Okay, well before you do, I would try to find a better ref for all the TripleMania's still. Primary may be the only way to go. I know you've looked, but thought to mention it again for future endevors.--WillC 22:13, 27 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
AAA's website was redesigned not that long ago and currently does not have a lot of really old results listed.  MPJ-DK  (No Drama Wrestling) Talk  00:04, 28 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Check archive.org, it may have a few archived results from AAA's site.--WillC 01:22, 28 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Not a bad idea
Alright.--WillC 02:51, 28 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I feel it passes the criteria now, so passed.--WillC 07:30, 29 July 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]