Okay, I'll give this a go. I've just read the whole article top to bottom and it's a great piece of writing that puts a whole slant on Hendrix's life that I never really appreciated before. One quick thing I want to comment on is I think the image captions need adjusting to put some more context into the bust and its trial. How is a 1973 picture of Toronto airport specifically relevant to the article? A few terms could use more explanation; we know who Noel Redding and Mitch Mitchell are, but not everyone will, for example.
Okay, thanks. I've clarified who Redding and Mitchell are, and I've added some detail to the image captions. Hope this resolves your concern. Thanks again for taking on the GAN! GabeMc(talk|contribs)17:48, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, specific comments (please note I edit-conflicted, so some of the image caption stuff might now be irrelevant)
The infobox picture could do with a little more context as to how specifically it relates to the article ie: "Hendrix's booking photo at the time of his arrest in Toronto, 3 May 1969"
From a usability point of view, having the wikilink to Hendrix in the title instead of the first use half a sentence later means it doesn't stand out on my browser. I can't think of another article that links to a sub-term in its actual title text.
Might it be worth dropping in a bit about the charges and trial's notability. The mentions of a possible cover up that's detailed in the body, and its general lack of coverage compared to, say, the Stones' Redland bust in 1967, would be worth dropping into the lead.
I personally prefer a comma or no punctuation to colons before quotations, but MOS:COMMA doesn't specify either way and it's not part of the GA criteria anyhow, so it doesn't matter
As mentioned above, the caption to File:Jimi hendryx experience 1968.JPG could add a little more context such as "The Jimi Hendrix Experience in 1968, around the time they were living in Benedict Canyon"
The reference to "Shapiro & Glebbeek 1995, pp. 357–358." is a little bit vague - particularly as its used to merely cite the 2 May 1969 Cobo Center gig. Could we tie it down to a specific page?
File:International Airport Toronto 1973.jpg - picture caption could say something like "On arrival at Toronto International Airport(pictured in 1973), Hendrix was detailed by customs and subsequently arrested"
"At 9:30 a.m. on May 3, 1969, while passing through Canadian customs..." - I assume events earlier on in this paragraph also took place on 3 May, though the specific time makes sense where it is
"While they awaited the lab results, tour manager Gerry Stickells" - we already know who Stickells is per a previous paragraph, "Stickells" will do here. "Tour manager Gerry Stickells" occurs elsewhere later in the article - same issue
"He was released by 8 p.m., and escorted to the venue by the Toronto police," - "escorted to the venue by the police" might be simpler, there's no reason to suspect a different police force took him to the gig
"The prosecution called as witnesses the officers who discovered the drugs and the lab technicians who identified the substance as heroin" - "identified them as heroin" might be simpler
[nb 3] can be integrated into the article ie : "The second witness called by the defense was the United Press International (UPI) journalist and Hendrix's friend Sharon Lawrence"
"Hendrix's manager, Chas Chandler...." needs a little more context. Earlier we were told that Mike Jeffrey was his manager. I can't remember the exact sequencing of who was managing him and when, but hopefully you can!" (FWIW Chandler's own article is in a very sorry state indeed with barely any referencing)
"The incident proved quite stressful for Hendrix" is vague. Might be worth specifically attributing it Shadwick, unless you have a quotation that it really is how Hendrix himself felt
The section title is POV (if you'd asked the police and authorities at the time they'd have outright denied it). How about "Reaction" or "Public response" instead?
I'm not sure about this one; neither "Reaction" or "Public response" is accurate to the section, IMO. I think that theory makes it clear that its not a proven fact, but I'm open to suggestions. The section is about a possible conspiracy to make rock stars look bad, so it seems appropriate to me. GabeMc(talk|contribs)18:35, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Was Wayne Kramer talking specifically about Hendrix's arrest or drug busts in general?
This is a very good article and an interesting insight into a part of Hendrix's life that I was previously unaware of, and which neatly ties into the general culture and reaction to rock stars in the 1960s. All the issues here are relatively minor things, so I'm putting the review On hold pending fixes. Ritchie333(talk)(cont)18:03, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]