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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 02:41, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

• "near Ciudad Constitución, in Mexico" that comma's not needed.
• "Even though, the picture" same, no comma needed.
• "October 1 was mostly not helpful due to another electronic problem, however," a semicolon after problem works better here.

Just a few punctuation things. Article's on hold and will be passed when done. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:41, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All fixed. Thanks for the review. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 02:58, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:53, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]