Excellent updates, thank you. I have been meaning to add content for some time but haven't found the time. I appreciate the added information! Paratrooper450 (talk) 21:25, 7 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your patience, I've read through the article and have a few comments thus far. Mainly small stuff, I don't see much to complain about here. I'll probably go and make some copyedits, let me know if I mess anything up. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:19, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No dabs or dead links.
Images all seem fine. FD and ER could possibly use links to the LOC, I think.
Do we know where she attended secretary school? Is there a good place to link that?
I don't know that this has been lost to history necessarily, but I couldn't turn it up in the various sources I read. This encyclopedia article on her, for example, just mentions it generically, which seems typical.[3]]
I'm curious, was she a government employee while Roosevelt was in office? I presume he personally paid her salary when she was first hired, but did the state/country take over after his election?
I don't remember any of my sources covering that--it's a good question, but one I don't have an answer to.
Thanks, Paratrooper. Mark, what would be your suggestion for how to work in the above? All it proves conclusively is that she was on the govt. payroll in 1938, but it seems safe to assume that she was throughout her tenure as a presidential secretary. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:23, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Good question, I'd suggest something a little vague like "During Roosevelt's tenure as president, LeHand became a government employee." Do you think that would work? Mark Arsten (talk) 16:59, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I presume she interacted with dignitaries while serving as White House hostess, are there any specifics on well-known individuals she interacted with/appraisals of her skill as hostess?
I don't recall encountering any of these specifics in my sources. It must surely have happened, and happened often, but the problem is LeHand is usually treated only in summary in materials focused on FDR and ER; I didn't turn up any books specific to her. There is a book out there by LeHand's successor/assistant Grace Tully, which might have more detailed anecdotes about LeHand, but I don't have a copy.
" LeHand accompanied him and acted as his hostess.[15] She also accompanied him to the spa town of Warm Springs, Georgia" Some repetition of "accompanied" here, might be best to avoid it if you can.
Done.
"moved into the second floor Governor's Mansion in Albany" second floor of the mansion?
Done.
"With Eleanor often away working in New York during this time" New York city?
Done.
"During her long tenure time as FDR's secretary" Looks like something got mixed up here.
Done.
Do we know what her view of his decision to run for president was? Was she able to help out in the campaign (since she had a breakdown during the '28 campaign)
I think I encountered a speculative reference that LeHand probably wasn't thrilled about it, but it was weak enough that I didn't think it was worth including. I couldn't find anything more detailed than that. She was loyal, so she wouldn't have said much on the record, and because she went down with a stroke before the end of his presidency, left no memoirs.
It might be interesting to have a quote or something from the Newsweek article, if you can access it.
I couldn't find this, unfortunately.
Relationship with Roosevelt
Check to make sure that "U.S." and "US" are standardized.
Done.
" In one of her later books, Eleanor wrote that she occasionally failed to "meet the need of someone whom I dearly love", stating, "You must learn to allow someone else to meet the need, without bitterness or envy, and accept it."" You should add an inline citation after this sentence.
Done.
Later illness and death
Check for comma consistency, I see "In June 1941" in this section then "In March 1945," in the next.
Done.
SS Marguerite LeHand
Is there a good way to combine this with the next section? Having two short sections like this is somewhat awkward.
Done.
Also, I think there might be a bit too much detail about the ship.
Slightly reduced.
References/Bibliography
Is this a reliable source? If not, would it be possible to find a better one?
Done.
Number ranges (i.e. 24–28) should use "pp." instead of just "p."
Done. Thanks for pointing that out, I didn't realize the template could do that.
Also, be consistent in the numbers you elide, "111-112" vs "116–17"
Looks like you got that one. That was in from a previous editor, I think.
A minor issue, but you should try to standardize the ISBNs (dashes vs no dashes)
Done.
A couple more minor comments that don't affect GA status:
You might want to say when his estate was probated and convert to c. 2012 dollars.
Also, might want to add a convert template to the size of the ship.
Also, forgot to note that I spotchecked 3, 6, 19, and 37 and found no issues.
Ok, at this point, I've concluded that this meets the GA criteria--good work! Interesting to read about a less-known figure like this, I wonder how famous she would have been had she gotten that close to a president nowadays? Mark Arsten (talk) 18:32, 11 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Glad to have been a part of this. I keep finding more material, which I will continue to add as I'm able.Paratrooper450 (talk) 13:56, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
