"; he died in 2004 at the age of 88." - should be separated as it may also mean that his son died at the age of 88 in 2004 (even if that is nonsense), and secondly the phrase has no connection to the other phrase
Link Netherlands, Jewish, Amsterdam
"His father was Leon van Gelder was a commercial traveller," - His father, Leon van ... was..."
"moved out of Amsterdam and into the village of Bilthoven.[3]" - Perhaps, "moved out of Amsterdam to Bilthoven" as a bit sloppy
"and mentioned it to a friend, " - it ;)?
"before joining the Johnny Fresno Band the house band at the Ostend Casino.[13]" - before joining the house band ...
Many thanks for this GOP. I think I've covered all your points, but please let me know if there is anything I've missed. Cheers - SchroCat (^ • @) 15:14, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]