GA Review
[edit]The word county should be wikilinked ... 2000, with an estimated population of 829,890 residing in eight countiesThis phrase should have two en dashes or none. One does not look right..mid- to lateThis sentence is too long...The city is the home to five Fortune 500 companies: ConAgra Foods; Union Pacific Corporation; Peter Kiewit and Sons, Inc.; Mutual of Omaha Companies; and Berkshire Hathaway, the investment vehicle of legendary investor and so-called "Oracle of Omaha" Warren Buffett. Perhaps, just mention the 5 companies in the lead, and do the expanded description in the economy section.- This image is tagged as obsolete ...Image:OmahaCityFlag.gif..so it should get an updated tag.
- I don't know how to update the tag.
In the sentence, it may be good to mention something about the fact the ensuing terms refer to first nations, aboriginal peoples, so that the sentence flows better to those not of the state who are not familiar with the indidual native peoples of this location. Since the 1600s, the Omaha, Pawnee, Otoe, the Missouri, the Ponca and Ioway all variously occupied the land that became Omaha.Within twenty years of the founding of the Stockyards in South Omaha, In this sentence should Stockyards be capitalized or wikilinked if it is a capital to show a name of something or another?joined by Eastern European Jews and black migrants from the South; I do believe I agree that East European Jews should all be capitalised in this instance but I don't believe south should be.$100 million The $ sign should be wikilinked as should any other currency to indicate american currency or what have you. dates and numbers - currency- It would be nice to add the names of the city counties...five in Nebraska and wikilink them so there is easy access if someone requires their name for research, or wants to reach that county article. It would also be cool for researchers or genealogists in the WWW who would like to know what the city counties are.
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- Not necessary for GA, but a nice thing to do would be to give the pretty picture...Image:Omaha0025.jpg some categories.
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The first time initials are mentioned in an article they should be spelled out in full ie...only LDS templeMention could be made about the 4x100 freestyle relays and 4x200 freestyle relays being swimming events.It is good that the term Combined Statistical Area is wikilinked but it does not need the capitals, same thing through the entire sentence watch the capitals. The Omaha-Council Bluffs Combined Statistical Area comprises the Omaha-Council Bluffs Metropolitan Statistical Area and the Fremont Micropolitan Statistical Area; the CSA has a population of 858,720 (2005 Census Bureau estimate).What in the world is aNoDo,CWS, USHL, WPA-financed , BANTU and NCAA ? Neither are wikilinked neither are spelled out...as wikipedia is a source of info this is pertinent IMHO. I don't think American Automobile Association is the full definition of the AAA but perhaps if AAA does not have words and rather could be wikilinked to its definition ... NBA and HHL might be able to be construed by most readers, but it may be handy to spell them out so those with not too much sports savvy, don't have to click on the wikilinks, they can just read away. Oh...NoDo is wikilinked down in the education section, but not in the sections previous to this...that is a lo-o-ong ways to read to find out what a NoDo is.10 kilometer needs converstion template km to mi.- In case young folks are using the encyclopaedia article for projects, perhaps the chart abbreviations Census... Pop. ... %± could be given at the bottom of the chart in the Demographics section. The amount of statistics is worded amazingly well considering the number of numbers. Could any of the info be made into charts at all?
- Where pop is population and %t is % change.
- This is a standard template that I can't change.
Wikilink the word YankeeIn the section People the various ethnic groups are randomly wikilinked, it would be nice to do all, if some have been started.In 1909 mob violence force the Greek immigrant population to flee from the city should be the word forced - past tense.- References to facts appeared good at the beginning of the article, and virtually disappeared in the
middle paragraph of Race relations in Omaha...and there are none at all for the facts of the last paragraph. ...and the first paragraph of Notable residents... first three paragraphs of Transportation :-( All facts need references always, all paragraphs should be referenced as well.
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As six is spelled out at the beginning of the article 9 high schools nine should be spelled out in the education section. Manual of Style (dates and numbers)a 3,000 foot-long footbridge crossing into Council Bluffs perhaps re-word to allow for length conversion template thingie.change the word meatprocessing to meat processing and hardwon to hard won...bycicle to bicycle ... trafic to traffic...timeline to time line... according to spellcheck or wikilink.A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.Something could be done regarding section arrangement, the article begins with a rather timeline series through the long history section. Then the article delves into much shorter topic sections. There is mention of culture with music etc., then it moves to sport, then back to music, film and aspects of culture...then other topics, then we get the people involved in culture.There is mention of riots and conflicts especially culturally related ones in the detailed history section, then other the article moves over to other topics, then there is mention of neighborhoods and their ethnicity, then the article goes along and goes along, and then a section on demographics and ethnic distribution, and then a section on ethnic people and their neighborhoods and then the article cycles back to the beginning talking of riots again between the ethnic groups and it is hard to discern if the same or yet a different riot is introduced from the ones mentioned in the history section. It feels like the article repeats itself, just renames the section and goes arouund in a circle and a reader wants to join like minded topics together ie ethnic happenings of Omaha are all spread around about ......
perhaps a way to do this would be to put more of the detailed history timeline into the article History of Omaha so that the history topic does not overshadow the geography section and so on. The history section is the only one formatted into a timeline compared to the other sections which only deal with their topics and not in a timeline fashion, and this causes the repeats perhaps. So smuush the entirety of the history information including its subsections into a smaller history section, about the same size as the next longest section...culture. That would help the length of the Omaha article be shorter, would improve the history of Omaha article, and would help show that all the various contributing topics of Omaha are important to Omaha.
The lead talks about economy and growth and a little teeny blurb about jazz. So that's what one expects the article to be. The article talks about history and riots and ethnic cultures a lot and the economy and transportation section are w-a-a-a-y shorter than the l-o-o-o-ng history section. The lead does not even say anything that history related stuff will be in the article.
Something to do is to take the lead and copy and paste just the lead into a different page or place. Only read it as if it were featured on wikipedia and the lead is on the main page and nothing else of the article. Does the lead introduce the WWW reader to ALL sections of the article, so if I was to write a report for a teacher on topic X about Omaha I would know that this lead paragraph will point me to more info in section labelled topic X in the main part of the article itself.
The geography section is small, and it would be nice to know something of the Geography:natural features of the earth's surface so perhaps the recreations section could be put into the named section geography. and not have a section named recreations.The article contains a lot of information which is very awesome about Omaha, and citations are used for the majority. I will check the actual references later, as there are a quantituy of them. The first points are minor, then there is something about the flow. Each section read alone is awesome, it is just when the sections are put in the same place that there is joining - ness problems and flow issue thingies arise when they become part of a whole.</srike>reference 14 Nebraska Moments is online, it would be good to add the URL
add the URL for reference 15 Semi-Centennial History of Nebraska.add the URL for reference 11 online [1] The Gate City: A history of Omaha.]add the URL for reference 20 Nebraska: A guide to the Cornhusker state
*add the URL for reference 21 -23 -24 -28-30-31-35-36-38-106-The Gate City: A history of Omaha.- The fact The Union Pacific Railroad was founded in Omaha in 1867 was cited as reference 22. Reference 22 is an awesome article about Thomas Clark Durant (1820-1885) but no date of the founding of the UPR was given in the whole article. :-(
- The new reference also does not say anything about 1867 :-(
- Done, twice. I rewrote the sentences and added new citations.
add the URL for reference 25 In Search of the Racial Frontier: African Americans in the American West.add the URL for reference 29 No More Free Markets Or Free Beer: The Progressive Era in Nebraska,add the URL for reference 40 Nebraska: An Illustrated History.- add the URL for reference 50 The Negroes in Nebraska.
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add the URL for reference 55 + 81 Living City: How America's Cities Are Being Revitalized by Thinking Small in a Big Way,add the URL for reference Upstream Metropolis: An Urban Biography of Omaha and Council Bluffs.add the URL for reference The Changing Image of the City: Planning for Downtown Omaha,Ref 53 matches the library I can't find the fact mentioned for Reference 54???
- The fact The Union Pacific Railroad was founded in Omaha in 1867 was cited as reference 22. Reference 22 is an awesome article about Thomas Clark Durant (1820-1885) but no date of the founding of the UPR was given in the whole article. :-(
Comparing the article to the guidelines many of the sections are covered which are advised...How to fill out the geography section is a good outline here.
Check out advise on leads for placenames...guidelines, guidelinesAs per guidelines, a government section would be handy...and again some more tips on how to flesh out the geography section...Short sections and paragraphs are discouraged. (GA criteria)Left-aligned images should not be placed at the start of subsections.- References should be consistently formatted, eg. consistent author format, abbreviations for "page number", etc. compare reference 188 to the others.
- I believe this is done.
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- The article contains a lot of information and is basically just in need of some tweaks here and there. Good luck Kind Regards...SriMesh | talk 04:01, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
- I believe the requests of your review have been met. What's the next step? • Freechild'sup? 12:13, 24 September 2008 (UTC)
- There are many many references which are awesome...some have went away, will putter away at the rest in the morning.
- This reference no longer exists... a b "The Greater Omaha Advantage: Utilities" SCEDC. Retrieved 8/17/07
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- This reference is hard to use...USNews.com: America's Best Colleges 2008: Universities-Master's (Midwest): Top Schools. US News and World Report. Retrieved 5/28/08. ...as it shows a main page, with no direct reference to universities of Omaha, it still needs to be searched out. Perhaps link to the article within it which verifies your fact.
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- This link went away. ^ Losa, J. (2006) "On the Town: Fans Should Support Local Hip-Hop." Omaha World-Herald. 11/2/06. Retrieved 7/1/07.
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- This link went away. "Frequently Asked Questions", Millard Public Schools. Retrieved 5/28/08.
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- This link went away as well... (nd) History. Durham Western Heritage Museum. Retrieved 6/7/07.
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- This link went away... 135. Hassebroek, A. (2006) "Holland Center Further Energized Omaha's Lively Culture." Omaha World Herald. 10/15/06. Retrieved 6/7/07.
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- This link is also gone. 139 (nd) History. Durham Western Heritage Museum. Retrieved 6/7/07.
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SriMesh | talk 05:39, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
- This site does not keep their articles online very long...http://www.redorbit.com
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- This site does not really veriy the fact it is cited for. It is a good teaching tool, but does not support this article at this juncture..116 Lesson Plans for Omaha Race Riot of 1919. NebraskaStudies.org. Retrieved 12/28/07.
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- ^74 (2006) Indicators for the Greater Omaha Minority Community. Minority Economic Development Council. Retrieved 9/5/08.
I couldn't get this link to come up, it continually timed out.
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- 64 "Midtown Omaha to Become Destination Even After Work", Creighton University website. Retrieved 5/18/07. could not be found
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- There checked all the online references. Sorry for the delay. Kind Regards SriMesh | talk 16:55, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for doing so much to help the article SriMesh. Now I think I've done everything I can - not sure what to do about what I can't do though. • Freechild'sup? 13:18, 26 September 2008 (UTC)
The 'media' section is too short and does not meet the completeness criterion. It looks like the contents of the "see also" link Media in Omaha, Nebraska is mostly a list of radio & tv stations, which is fine. But you should say more about the media in the Omaha article itself, than simply, "The city also has four television news stations." See the Media and Popular Culture" section of the Flagstaff, Arizona article for an example. You can talk about the media market, and provide a citation, and discuss (in prose) the major television stations there. Some information on movies and tv shows might be good to include, too, but be careful not to just use a bulleted list for that (it's bordering on "trivia"). Dr. Cash (talk) 16:25, 26 September 2008 (UTC)
- Done. Thanks for the feedback, Derek.cashman - I expanded the section greatly. • Freechild'sup? 00:52, 28 September 2008 (UTC)