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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 20:34, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sup! I'm going to be taking a look at this GAN as well. Any section marked with a  Working tag means that I haven't finished combing through it, but feel free to start making changes as you see them! Kncny11 ^(shoot) 20:34, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

• The infobox lists the area as 127.5 acres, which is inconsistent with the rest of the article
  •  Fixed I guess this was copied from somewhere. Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• Once again, every sentence in the second paragraph is written in passive voice. The second sentence (Joseph L. Hautman) and fourth (The Sol Goldman Play Center) can be made active
  •  Done

• Ref [2] doesn't appear to mention the area of the park
  • It is in the sidebar. "More About Red Hook Recreation Area: Acreage: 58.50". Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• Ref [4] mentions nothing about tennis courts or a picnic area
  •  Removed
• "Directly across from Clinton Street,"
  •  Added
• "is a recreational area soccer field 1" is there a word missing there?
  •  Added Yes. Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• "This playground used to contain a wading pool"
  •  Added

• Switch hyphen to en dash for "1934-36"
  • I rephrased the sentence to avoid a dash entirely
• "The west and east wings are both divided" → "Both wings" in the second sentence of the paragraph beginning "The west wing", to reduce repetition
  •  Done
• Kill the space between the end of the sentence and the reference at the end of the last bathhouse para
  •  Removed
• More clarification than anything: the past tense is used for the arcades on the west and east wing -- did something happen to them to change this? The rest of the para is in present tense
  • The arcades have been closed and all entrance is currently through the main bathhouse. I'm not sure when these entrances were closed. Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• "The main pool measures" → "It measures"
  •  Done

• WL Red Hook here (first iteration of the neighborhood in the body)
  •  Done

• "thirty-eight acres" → "38 acres" per MOS:NUMBERS
  •  Done This was originally phrased to avoid putting a date right next to another number. Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

• "In the 1940s, the Gowanus Parkway was built by parks commissioner Moses," → "In the 1940s, Moses built the Gowanus Parkway"
  •  Done
• "eighteen thousand residents" → "18,000 residents" per MOS:NUMBERS
  •  Done
• Move [75] to the end of the sentence
  •  Done
• Add meter conversion for the "18-foot tall metal fence"
  •  Done

• Ref [2] says that it links to Highlights, but it actually links to History
  •  Fixed

• Stability looks good.
• Pictures are CC and relevant.
• Earwig is temporarily down -- I'll AGF for now and come back around to this.

Putting  On hold for now. Will check Earwig when possible.

@Kncny11: Thanks for another review. I've addressed all of these issues. For [2], the area is within the sidebar at the bottom right, but it is a History section so I've fixed that. Epicgenius (talk) 21:51, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Epicgenius Quick on the draw! Earwig is back up and checked out, so I think this one is good to go! :) Kncny11 ^(shoot) 21:57, 3 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]