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Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 03:27, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That synth is absurdly catchy; I'm excited to give this a review! My comments should be done by Sunday. Feel free to discuss them if you disagree.

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The article reads nicely, I have a handful of comments though. For the record, I did a fairly large copyedit, as well as some adjustments to the "Hotline Bling" sentence and the last paragraphs of the "Recording and composition" and music video "Reception" sections. I also adjusted some links.

• The article should be consistent with its usage of release dates in parentheses. If you stick with them, a sentence or two might be disrupted, but there are workarounds.
• featuring vocals from American singer Tinashe in a remix version. It was sent to US contemporary hit radio on November 22, 2016. — to clarify that the remix version was sent to radio, combine these phrases into their own sentence
• Lyrically, the song is defined as — perhaps, "was described as"
• where Spears uses double entendre, while evoking one-night stands, the ritual of sleepovers with friends and the teenage game of seven minutes in heaven. — I don't know how to make this work with the previous phrase, so I'd split it off into its own sentence
• placed emphasis on — "emphasized"
• It also later appeared in Just Dance 2018. — I'm not sure how to incorporate this into the article, but since it's probably not the most essential, you could remove it.
• several polls for different magazines to ask — perhaps, "several polls to different magazines asking"
• For clarity, is it worth mentioning that the original version was released as part of the album before the remix version was released?
• it's definitely a song you wanna take you and your girlfriends go out and just have a great time — I did a double take when I read this. I don't want to make too many modifications, but I feel like it's in order. Perhaps: "It's definitely a song you [listen to when] you and your girlfriends go out and just have a great time".
• composition details — "details" feels a bit odd, I would remove it
• three minutes and thirty-four seconds (3:34) — is the length in brackets necessary? Although, if it's been done on other articles, then fair game.
• "cooing backing vocals" and percussion — this sort of implies that the percussion was cooing. Did any other source give a musical description of the percussion?
• For Alex Macpherson of The Guardian, the song "is reminiscent of Spears's 2003 album, In the Zone." — in what ways?
• Consider reinforcing the first "Reception" section into two paragraphs about the opinions towards its composition and sexuality. Or at least join the two sentences that are critical of the latter.
• said that the song "serves its purpose quite well", calling it "another danceable song." — "the song" becomes repetitive, so I would leave it at "dancable"
• "Slumber Party" debuted at number 157 following the release of Glory, and climbed to number 121 a week later. — of what chart?
• "purpley-blue room" — "purplish-blue" (without quotation marks)
• For Zac Johnson of E! News, "Not since 'Boys' has Britney made walking through party look like art", and also praised the chemistry between Spears and Tinashe — these phrases don't mesh together, consider splitting them.
• I didn't realize that the Slant Magazine review was mixed until I read it. I would make this a bitclearer.
• Consider adding a "Version" column to the "Release history" table, where you include the original, the remix version, and the remix EP.

Almost all sources are reliable and no major issues with their formatting. Though, a handful of them were dead, so I used the "fix dead links" tool. Still, I have a few comments.

• The "House Of Blues Studio" in the infobox needs a citation
• where Spears uses double entendre — can't find in the article
• The video also features Spears' ex-husband Sam Asghari. — their divorce is not mentioned in the article, but this Today piece mentions his role retrospectively.
• A music video directed by Colin Tilley was shot on October 25, 2016, — I would leave this at "October 2016". I would remove the specific date in the article as well. Spears's photo might not have been posted the day of the shoot, or the shoot could've lasted many days.
• I would remove the Headline Planet source. I'm not convinced of its reliability and one of the phrases is not supported by it.
• The Fox News source is syndicated from an ET Online source, cite it instead.
• I'm not sure of PopCrush's reliability, but in its first use, it's fine as a primary source. For the Triple Ho sentence, though, it fails verification. I tried peeking around KMVQ's website, but couldn't find much; the sentence might have to be removed.

• Kheraj, Alim (August 25, 2016). "Britney Spears's new album Glory reviewed: Is it any good, then?". Digital Spy. Archived from the original on October 29, 2016. Retrieved October 30, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y
• Rohwedder, Kristie (October 28, 2016). "Britney Spears & Tinashe's Remix Of 'Slumber Party' Is Sure To Bring The Heat". Bustle. Archived from the original on October 31, 2016. Retrieved October 30, 2016.
  • Looks good, exept for the implication that it was filmed on the 26th, as adressed above. Y
• McCormick, Neil (August 26, 2016). "Glory might just be Britney Spears's masterpiece – review". The Daily Telegraph. Archived from the original on August 26, 2016. Retrieved September 14, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y
• Macpherson, Alex (August 26, 2016). "Britney Spears: Glory – track-by-track review of a triumphant return". The Guardian. Archived from the original on September 10, 2016. Retrieved September 12, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y
• Arceneaux, Michael (September 1, 2016). "On 'Glory,' Britney Spears Doesn't Sound Like a Robot With a Sex Addiction—Hallelujah". Complex. Archived from the original on October 29, 2016. Retrieved October 30, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y
• "Britney Spears Debuts Sexy 'Slumber Party' Video Featuring Tinashe: Watch". Billboard. November 18, 2016. Archived from the original on January 18, 2021. Retrieved November 18, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y
• Camp, Alexa (November 18, 2016). "Britney Spears and Tinashe Channel Eyes Wide Shut in 'Slumber Party' Music Video". Slant Magazine. Archived from the original on January 15, 2019. Retrieved November 19, 2016.
  • Looks good. Y

All sections seem nearly comprehensive. No glaring issues on this front.

No blatant promotion; quotes and statements are differentiated. In fact, quotes are used quite liberally, but they are all attributed.

No recent edit wars or content disputes.

Sufficiently illustrated, if not comprehensively. Fair use licences are satisfactory and the images improve the reader's understanding.

On first impression, the article looks very tidy! I think only a few more fixes are needed.

I'll be putting this on hold for now. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 15:49, 8 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

As @11JORN: seems to be busy with college for the forseeable future, I've taken the liberty of adressing these minor comments; I suppose this means another article promoted! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 13:49, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]