GA Review

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YAG

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I think the YAGs part in the article is alittle bit short. phosphors are mentioned in the lead, but not the importants YAGs for solid state lasers.--Stone (talk) 21:17, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

YAG is mentioned in the article body. Do you mean that a mention of YAG also needs to be added to the lead? I'll go ahead and do that when I expand the lead. However, the lead section is the last one I touch in an article (==Compounds== and ==Occurrence== need fixing prior to FAC first). --mav (talk) 23:47, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review?

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Not sure what's happening here, appears to be a reviewer, but nothing on GAN page except my "on hold". Please clarify, because I don't want to waste my time if someone else is reviewing. Just one comment for now. Yttrium metal of 99.9% purity is commercially available at a cost of about $75 per ounce. What currency - Nicaraguan cordobas? US is not the only currency to use $ sign. Is the price guaranteed for the foreseeable future - if not, need a date for that price. Ounce needs a metric conversion, at least, in a science article, even if it's normally traded in the imperial unit. Why is price a characteristic of Yttrium? Is the price standard worldwide, or is it just in the US? jimfbleak (talk) 11:19, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'd prefer to simply remove that sentence altogether since it is at least 10 years out of date and I don't know of any place to find reliable info to keep such a figure updated or even if USD and once are the internationally-accepted currency and unit yttrium trades under. --mav (talk) 23:46, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I'd agree, doesn't fit in anyway jimfbleak (talk) 05:43, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
About the review: Go ahead, please provide your review feedback and I'll (and likely others) will make sure to address your concerns. --mav (talk) 05:51, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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Obviously well on the way, some comments

somebody skilled should write the phonetic spelling right before the note. Nergaal (talk) 02:27, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

*History it was believed that earths - metal earths would be clearer

it is a dated term, check Earth (chemistry). Nergaal (talk) 16:55, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

*renamed it in honor of Gadolin and gave it an -ite ending to indicate this; gadolinite. - already said the -ite bit - renamed it gadolinite in honor of Gadolin would do

valency and oxidation state are not synonims. Nergaal (talk) 01:42, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

*The matter created was a multi-crystal multi-phase mineral, which was black and green. - a black and green multi-crystal, multi-phase mineral was produced. ?

That's it for now jimfbleak (talk) 06:46, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Final read

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  • The valency/ON point was not repetition, but that the ON bit is completely isolated, whereas to me the logical place would be immediately after the valency bit. I'm busy this morning, but I'll have another read through within the next 24
  • I don't think the unreffed bit actually needs refs, whether FA reviewers agree is another matter
  • image OK, refs OK.but I'm not sure of the point of linking some books to Google books when no preview is available
  • See also contains only previously linked items, seems pointless to me
jimfbleak (talk) 15:18, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've missed the ON point the first time but now it should be fine. The two google books I've found have previews. I've trimmed the see also to only the stuff that is suimilar to the name of the article.Nergaal (talk) 22:15, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Just a thought for FAC, I know it's not compulsory, but is it worth adding another image (TV tube maybe)? Anyway, onwards and upwards jimfbleak (talk) 05:51, 20 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]