”This helped her enter tournaments on the WTA Tour more consistently, however, at some points she later returned to tournaments on the ITF Circuit when her ranking dropped” – run-on sentence, how about “This helped her enter tournaments on the WTA Tour more consistently, though she still plays tournaments on the ITF Circuit when her ranking is lower.”
On the last sentence, could you specify when she started studying psychology and which university it was she attended?
Unfortunately, no. I only found at one reference published in July 2015 that she planned to start studies in January 2016. JamesAndersoon (talk) 11:57, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Last 2 sentences of 1st paragraph start with “In” – maybe change the start of one of them for variety.
I kept first sentence, but changed the second as "She then made her main-draw debut at the $25K event in Astana where she also won her first title.". JamesAndersoon (talk) 12:14, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
” Guangzhou Open, but lost” – “Guangzhou Open; but she lost” – Needs verb change to be correct grammatically; semicolon needed to show that this is place between independent clauses.
★The following year in May, she made her return ... ◆ instead of ◆ She made her return on the ITF Tour ...
★A month later, she won her third ITF ... ◆ instead of ◆ In June 2012, she won her third ITF ...
★In the first round, she defeated the world No. 40 and top seed Peng Shuai in straight sets. ◆ instead of ◆ She drew top seed Peng Shuai and defeated the world No. 40 in straight sets.
★Then, in the following round, she made a lopsided win over ... ◆ instead of ◆ She followed this up with a lopsided win over ...
2013: Back in the top 200
”winning over” – just used word win, so how about “prevailing over”
★First she played at the $25K event in Hong Kong, reaching the final ... ◆ instead of ◆ She made her season debut at the $25K event in Hong Kong, reaching the final ...
★Then, she entered Australian Open qualifying, registering a close ... instead of ... She then entered Australian Open qualifying, refistering a close ...
★In order to get to the main-draw she defeated Andreea Mitu, followed with win over Canadian Stéphanie Dubois. ... instead of ... She then came from a set down to defeat Andreea Mitu to get to the final stage of qualification, where she beat Canadian Stéphanie Dubois.
”proceded to beat” – “beat” by itself will do the job.
Take out “however” in third sentence of third paragraph—while commas are correctly placed, there are so many that it gets a little difficult to follow. Removing the word will help.
”before having to retire” – was she injured during the round? If not, phrase in a way that makes clearer she lost the round.
She retired during the second set, so I modified the sentence. JamesAndersoon (talk) 13:10, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
★She followed it up by dispatching Ajla Tomljanović before having to retire in her quarterfinal match against Christina McHaleduring the second set. - bold part is added
★Then, at the Cincinnati Open, she was advanced to the another second round, losing there to Lucie Šafářová. instead of She then made another second round, losing there to Lucie Šafářova at the Cincinnati Open.
” into the top 50, finishing” – “into the top 50. She finished” – Need to do it this way to get the right subject. The sets didn’t finish number 34-she did.
★All of these helped her rise into the top 50. She finished year as world No. 34. instead of All of these helped her rise into the top 50, finishing the year as world No. 34.
2015: Continued success until second-half slump
Success really didn’t continue that long if she slumped in the second half. Maybe try titling it “2015: A Tale of Two Seasons”? Or “2015: Great start, second-half slump”
I will pick "Great start, second half slump". Find it more appropriate. JamesAndersoon (talk) 13:28, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
”quarterfinal, at the Hobart International” – comma not needed
Four sentences in a row start with “At” ; vary a couple of them for variety.
Corrections:
★Diyas followed up this performance by making double-bagel against Sabine Lisicki in the first round of the Premier-level Stuttgart Open but later did not make it to the quarterfinal, losing to Sara Errani. ◆ instead of ◆ At the Premier-level Stuttgart Open, she notched the WTA's second double-bagel of the season against Sabine Lisicki in the first round but did not make it to the quarterfinal, losing to Sara Errani.
★Her next step was Premier Mandatory Madrid Open, where she lost at the beginning of the tournament to Carla Suárez Navarro. ◆ instead of ◆ At the Madrid Open, she lost at the beginning of the tournament to Carla Suárez Navarro.
★She finished clay season with playing at the French Open as 32nd seed. ◆ instead of ◆ At the French Open, Diyas was seeded 32nd.
★There, she defeated qualifier Dinah Pfizenmaier in the first round in straight sets but eventually lost to Alison Van Uytvanck in the following round. ◆ instead of ◆ She defeated qualifier Dinah Pfizenmaier in straight sets but eventually lost to Alison Van Uytvanck in the second round.
”In March, she traveled to the United States, first to play in the Indian Wells Open, where she beat Jamie Loeb in the first round, but could not beat Victoria Azarenka in the next round.” – run-on sentence. How about “In March, she traveled to the United States, where her first event was the Indian Wells Open. She beat Jamie Loeb in the first round, but could not beat Victoria Azarenka in the next round.”
” On clay, she reached two second rounds, at the Internationaux de Strasbourg losing to Alla Kudryavtseva and then at the French Open losing to Simona Halep.” – “On clay, she reached two second rounds: the Internationaux de Strasbourg, where she lost to Alla Kudryavtseva, and the French Open, where she lost to Simona Halep.”
★Then, she won her first ITF title since June 2014 at a $25K tournament in Nanning. ◆ instead of ◆ She then won her first ITF title since June 2014 at a $25K tournament in Nanning.
★The following week, she managed to reach the quarterfinals of the WTA 125K Zhengzhou Open but then lost to the top seed Peng Shuai. ◆ instead of ◆ At the WTA 125K Zhengzhou Open, she managed to reach the quarterfinals before losing to the top seed Peng Shuai.
★Her next step was $100K ITF tournament in Anning, Kunming Open, where she reached the final but lost to Zheng again. ◆ instead of ◆ At the Kunming Open $100K ITF tournament, she reached the final but lost to Zheng Saisai again.
★Things get better in the following week, when she was advanced to the semifinals of the $60K Fukuoka but lost to Magdaléna Rybáriková. ◆ instead of ◆ She then lost to another returning player Magdaléna Rybáriková twice, in Fukuoka and Surbiton.
★Diyas started grass season with first-round loss in Surbiton but then following week won a $100K Manchester Trophy, scoring ... ◆ instead of ◆ Diyas then won a $100K tournament, the Manchester Trophy, scoring ...
” lost to another returning player Magdaléna Rybáriková twice” – awkward. Probably best to take out “another returning player” altogether.
” and defending champion Christina McHale to reach the final. She eventually beat” – Reach the final is awkward here because of how far it is separated from the rest of the sentence. How about “and defending champion Christina McHale. In the final, she beat”
2018: Back as a top 100 mainstay and another injury
She falls out of the top 100 just the very next year, so “mainstay” probably isn’t a great characterization. How about “2018: Back in the top 100 and another injury”
” and then the failure to qualify for the Miami Open with the subsequent loss of ranking points saw her once again drop out of the top 100” – “and her failure to qualify for the Miami Open saw her once again drop out of the top 100.” – Clearer, and I think the context explains the effect of failing to qualify for the Miami Open.
” After that, she played at the Australian Open, reaching the third round where she played against No. 10, Kiki Bertens, but failed to reach the fourth round, missing a chance to make her best result at that tournament.” – “After that, she played at the Australian Open, facing No. 10, Kiki Bertens in the third round but losing and missing a chance for her best finish at that tournament.”
” representing the team from 2009 to 2011, and again from 2015 through 2019, with absence in 2017” – “representing the team from 2009 to 2011, 2015 through 2016, and 2018 through 2019.”
” playing in doubles alongside Galina Voskoboeva and also winning that match with a double bagel” – “winning in doubles alongside Galina Voskoboeva with a double bagel”
Diyas won all of her three singles matches. - bold was missing. Fixed. JamesAndersoon (talk) 17:42, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
“That was enough for Kazakhstan to win their round-robin group, however, later they lost to Japan in the play-off, and missing another chance to get to the World Group II play-off.” – “That was enough for Kazakhstan to win their round-robin group; however, they later lost to Japan in the play-off, missing another chance to get to the World Group II play-off.”
”After her shoulder surgery that she underwent in late 2011, she started a collaboration with a new coach Alan Ma in Guangzhou” – “After undergoing shoulder surgery in late 2011, she started working with Alan Ma in Guangzhou.”
” She is the third player from Kazakhstan to win that award, and they have combined for four such awards in total” – “She is the third player from Kazakhstan to win that award, and hers was the fourth won by a Kazakhstan national.”
” she was nominated for the award of Newcomer of the Year, but lost to Belinda Bencic” – “she was nominated for Newcomer of the Year but lost to Belinda Bencic”
I changed it with another one. Not sure if it reliable source. - [1]JamesAndersoon (talk) 18:16, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Looks more reliable than the last, which appeared to be a blog. This one looks more like a news organization. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 16:45, 23 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Is ref 97 a reliable source?
Also not sure if it is reliable source. In the reference that I added in previous notes [96], she mentioned that Wimbledon is her favourite tournament. JamesAndersoon (talk) 18:19, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Might look like a lot of changes listed, but these are mostly picky grammar things because you’ve done a great job on the article already. Let me know when these changes are addressed, and I'll take another look! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:20, 20 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]