The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Narutolovehinata5 (talk) 04:02, 13 January 2020 (UTC)
May be renominated for DYK if it is expanded by 5x or promoted to Good Article status.

Lori Verderame

  • Comment: I'd like to get a DYK for this article I've just overhauled if possible, and this seems like probably the most interesting one that can stand pulled out of context. "Dr. Lori" is her stage/television name, as stated in the article, like Dr. Oz or Dr. Phil. — the Man in Question (in question)

5x expanded by The Man in Question (talk). Self-nominated at 10:09, 13 December 2019 (UTC).

  • Comment (not a formal review): the hook is quite wordy and cumbersome. More concise hooks are better at hooking reader's attention. All extraneous factoids should be pruned, so that the purpose of the hook is apparent. Are dates and dollar amounts important? --Animalparty! (talk) 01:43, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
  • Very true, so:
ALT1: ... that Dr. Lori became an antiques appraiser after meeting a woman who sold George Washington's obituary for $50; it later resold for $50,000?
- shorter, and the ambiguity makes it hookier. Johnbod (talk) 18:42, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
  • What's lost in this rewrite is that now it sounds like she became an antiques appraiser to make money and take advantage of people. Since this is a living person we're talking about—"the possibility of harm to living subjects must always be considered". — the Man in Question (in question) 01:37, 18 December 2019 (UTC)