- "Ezekiel Polk, the future president's grandfather"..... we've already established Ezekiel's relationship to him in the previous paragraph, so the "future president's" bit is repetitive
- Done.
- "James learned from the political talk around the dinner table; both Samuel and Ezekiel were strong supporters of President Thomas Jefferson and opponents of the Federalist Party"..... did this perhaps influence his own views? If so, I would make note of that.
- That is what I meant to imply.
- "though the operation was successful, it may have left James sterile, as he had no children" sounds rather speculative; can you find anything more concrete on sterility?
- There's no way of knowing for certain, as this would be a private thing. The sources speculate on sterility or even impotence.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:42, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- May as well just scrap when there's not enough known for certain Snuggums (talk / edits) 05:25, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- It's widespread among historians and biographers. I think it should stay.--Wehwalt (talk) 10:51, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- In that case, maybe say something along the lines of "it is believed to have left James sterile" if biographers suspect this Snuggums (talk / edits) 01:40, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Used your words.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:10, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "enrolled at a Presbyterian academy in 1813"..... a name would help if known
- I'll look into it.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:16, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Added.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:17, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "where he may have met his future wife, Sarah Childress"..... again, definitive answers are preferable
- We don't know. Her older brother was Polk's classmate there.
- Just get rid of it altogether then Snuggums (talk / edits) 05:25, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Cut.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:51, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Having "the late" in "singling out the late Alexander Hamilton" is a bit wordy
- Not everyone has dates of death in their memory, and I'd like to stress that Hamilton was dead by then.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:42, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "On September 20, 1819 Polk, with Grundy's endorsement, was elected clerk of the Tennessee State Senate" is clunky; try "With Grundy's endorsement, Polk was elected clerk of the Tennessee State Senate on September 20, 1819"
- The issue with that is that there's the rest of the sentence, that the Senate sat in Murfreesboro, and that Grundy had been elected. I can't pin that information easily on to the sentence as you have it.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:16, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "Polk courted Sarah Childress—they married on January 1, 1824 in Murfreesboro"..... she should only be linked in her first mention within article body, and is it known when they started courting or were engaged?
- I linked for a second time as the first is in a place the reader may not notice. I think a second link is justified. I've added some dates--Wehwalt (talk) 23:42, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Link discussion mooted by the above deletion.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:51, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "Thus began an alliance" reads awkwardly, maybe "It began an alliance" or "It established an alliance" would be better
- I like what we have better than your suggestions, though I am not wedded to it.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:42, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed "thus" to "this"
- "Important" from "most important and loyal supporters in the House" seems like a personal opinion
- Prominent.
- "may have been written by Polk"..... aside from being a Jacksonian, what evidence is there suggesting this?
- According to Siegenthaler, Polk was accused of it by Jackson's opponents, but he denied it.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:57, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:59, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "Although the Polks remained childless, they were rearing the children of James' three deceased brothers"..... how many of his nieces and/or nephews did they look after?
- I've cut it. There seem to have been at least three, but they weren't all at the same time. J. Knox Walker, later the presidential secretary, seems to have been one of them. Two others were Marshall and Eunice Polk, children of Polk's brother Marshall, though Eunice died while at school. Marshall doesn't seem to have come to the White House with Polk.
- Even if "In any event" from "In any event, the Whig presidential candidate, General William Henry Harrison" is appropriate tone, it just overfills the sentence, so scratch that bit
- Cut.
- It's not grammatically correct to begin a sentence with "but" as you did with "But due to the opposition to Van Buren" as it makes a sentence fragment. You can make this into a complete sentence by turning it into a "however" or merging it with the previous sentence.
- Done.
More to come later. Currently up to the "General election" subsection. Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:12, 27 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- While I can tell that the "myself" in "I intend to be myself President of the U.S." is intended to be emphasis, we're only supposed to use those for titles of works like books, journals, magazines, and newspapers.
- The sources have it italicized. I gather it was underlined in the original. Isn't that almost altering the original?--Wehwalt (talk) 11:37, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Not when you use the same words and punctuation as it does Snuggums (talk / edits) 18:44, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- This is the nearest to the original that I can find and it has italics.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:21, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Even so, it's not truly altering the text unless you use different words and/or punctuation. Snuggums (talk / edits) 01:40, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- SNUGGUMS, just so we're clear, because I'm not as fluent in every detail of the MOS as you, are you asking me to remove the italics? Can you point me to where it says that? Not doubting you, just for information. I'd really like to keep the emphasis here in some way.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:17, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Looking through MOS:ITAL, it turns out this is better for emphasis than bold or all capital letters, but should only be used sparingly and with <em>word</em> or ((em|word)) rather than ''word''. Just be sure you're not using the two apostrophes. Snuggums (talk / edits) 22:50, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- OK, used the template.--Wehwalt (talk) 23:19, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "The lack of trust Polk had in Taylor was returned by the Whig general"..... why not just say "Polk and Taylor did not trust each other"?
- Because that treats the subject as fresh, and the issue of Polk not trusting his Whig generals has been discussed before.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:37, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- The second and third paragraphs under "Fiscal policy" could probably be merged when the third is quite short in order to avoid choppy-looking text
- Done.
- Having a really long paragraph followed right by a super short paragraph within "Judicial appointments" seems imbalanced; I'd even them out somewhat
- I've split the long paragraph.
- Even if "likely because he deemed it unpresidential to canvass for votes" wasn't just a guess, it seems unnecessary when you've already noted how Polk didn't run for another term to begin with
- Campaigning for one's successor is a bit different from campaigning for oneself. The reader may recollect that the recent Democratic president had a different view on whether to campaign for another president of their own party.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:19, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- What I'm getting at is that "Polk did not campaign, remaining at his desk at the White House" by itself is sufficient, though you could add Taylor into that sentence if you'd like. Snuggums (talk / edits) 01:40, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- I've cut the text objected to and played with things there a bit.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:10, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "March 4, the presidential inauguration day until 1937, fell on a Sunday"..... seems superfluous
- Enough people know, I think, that March 4 used to be the inauguration day to justify an explanation.
- What I mean is that the day of the week doesn't really seem to be a significant detail Snuggums (talk / edits) 18:44, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- But it is the reason for the postponement of the swearing-in. I'm not sure I can explain the postponement without mentioning the day of the week.--Wehwalt (talk) 20:30, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Then you should more directly say so in the text Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:44, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- I've tweaked it.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:11, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "in early June, he fell ill again, likely with cholera"..... if you don't know for sure what this was, then just "fell ill again" is sufficient
- Does "his infectious disease death" refer to cholera? While the section on his death seems to suggest that was what killed him, we should opt to be explicit on the matter.
- On the above two: that we cannot know with 100 percent certainty what killed him, most sources say either "cholera" or "most likely cholera". I don't know how the reader is well served by saying nothing.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:06, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Perhaps you could then say he was believed to have died from it Snuggums (talk / edits) 18:44, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- I've tweaked it a bit.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:11, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- I fail to see how "Polk had a post-presidency of 103 days, the shortest of the presidents who did not die in office" is worth including
- Cut.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:11, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "The 17 year old and one of the 12 year olds were purchased together at an estate sale, and may have been brothers"..... whether they were related or not doesn't seem to be the focus of the slave purchase, so let's delete the "and may have been brothers" bit
- Cut.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:22, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "and it is unlikely that her new partner, having paid $28,500 for a half-interest in the plantation and its slaves, would have allowed the laborers to go free had she died while slavery was legal" seems more appropriate for Sarah's article (if anywhere)\\
- It deals with how the provisions of Polk's will were carried out, or in this case, not. He could have left his wife a life estate in the slaves, with them manumitted on her death. Like Washington did.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:45, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Detail on deaths and tombstones of slaves doesn't seem relevant here
- I think, especially in the present day, it is useful to know that the issue of Polk and slavery is still being examined, and that the slaves are not forgotten.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:45, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- "in Arthur M. Schlesinger's poll"..... do you mean Arthur Sr. or Arthur Jr.?
That should do it. Thankfully there are no major issues with this article. Snuggums (talk / edits) 05:25, 28 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- I think I've responded or changed all those things. Thank you for a most thorough review.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:17, 29 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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