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The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 10 June 2021 [1].


Shuttle-Centaur[edit]

Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:59, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a proposed upper stage for the Space Shuttle using the Centaur upper stage rocket. The whole Space Shuttle program was mired in controversy from the start, and this project spent a billion dollars with meagre results. The article addresses several questions and provides object lessons. It has been said that Shuttle-Centaur was a casualty of NASA's increased safety consciousness after the Space Shuttle Challenger disaster, but as the article shows, this was not entirely true. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:59, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Text review by Neopeius[edit]

I promised to review this article, and I shall, but things are still very busy. I have a few issues I'll want to talk about when I've done the whole thing. Sorry for the delay. Putting this here as a placeholder so mods don't close the FAC for lack of interest -- this is a worthy article. --Neopeius (talk) 14:57, 7 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Here's my review, at long last, but I'm glad I waited as you had a chance to address other issues. There's not too much to be done as we worked together on A-Class. Here's what I've got:

Background

Centaur


*Change "The technical problems were overcome. The development" to "The technical problems were overcome, and the development" (it makes the sentence a little longer, but otherwise, the first sentence just sits there.

Space Shuttle upper stages

*"However, the IUS was constructed in a modular fashion, with two stages, a large one" Replace last comma with a colon.


Deep space probes *"which was interested in the development of autonomous spacecraft that could take evasive action in the face of anti-satellite weapons, and the manner in which the JPL was designing Galileo to withstand the intense radiation of the magnetosphere of Jupiter, which had had application in surviving nearby nuclear detonations." I'm not sure how this relates to Galileo

Perfect.

*Change "there was another mission on the cards:" to "...in the cards" (since you're using American English throughout)

Decision to use Shuttle-Centaur

*"NASA decided to split Galileo into two separate spacecraft," replace comma with colon

Congressional approval

*Change "In addition to the funding, it directed NASA and Boeing to cease work on the two stage IUS for Galileo" to "In addition to allocating funding, the Ac directed NASA and Boeing..."'

Management

*"At first, the engineers at the Lewis Research Center preferred to have it declared a payload" "At first" not followed by an expected "but later"...

Preparations

*"both crews were entirely composed of astronauts who had already flown in space at least once before, and were known to not suffer from it." Delete comma.

Cancellation *I think the paragraph immediately preceding, about the Challenger disaster, would be better as the first paragraph of this section.

Legacy

*change "When the JPL tried to use its high gain antenna" to "When the JPL tried to use Galileo's high gain antenna"

*"The Ulysses project scientists had to wait even longer; the Ulysses spacecraft was launched using the IUS and Payload Assist Module on STS-41 on 6 October 1990.[33]" Currently this goes right into the Titan IV sentence. I'd put a carriage return after. It's all right if it stands alone.

  • MOS:PARAGRAPH: The number of single-sentence paragraphs should be minimized, since they can inhibit the flow of the text. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Minimized, but not eliminated. As stands, it's something of a non sequitur.

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That's what I got! --Neopeius (talk) 00:52, 12 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Nick-D[edit]

Support Comments by Nick-D As disclosure, I'm reviewing in response to a request from Hawkeye on my talk page. I don't think I've ever given them an easy ride on nominations though, and won't be doing so this time either ;)

This article took six months to get through A-class, so I asked out of fear that it would get archived for want of reviewers like my last FAC submission. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 10:03, 8 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Wehwalt.[edit]

  • The lead paragraph is rather long. I might try to split it.
    Already split. Just a running issue with the browser. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Someone reading the first paragraph by itself might not be clear on whether the Shuttle-Centaur actually happened, since you open by saying it was "proposed" but say two versions were produced.
    Deleted "proposed". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "during a demonstration to United States Air Force (USAF) and NASA officials.[6]" I would say "for" rather than "to" as more common in AmEng.
    Take your word for it. Done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Budget cutbacks in the early 1970s led to the termination of Saturn V production" When did the Saturn V production in fact end? Just makings sure dates are correct.
    The decision to cancel was taken in 1969; the last one was delivered in 1972. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Added that the decision was taken in 1969. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "When the USAF questioned NASA's determination that all US space launches, civil and military, should use the Space Shuttle, NASA Administrator James M. Beggs insisted that expendable launch vehicles were obsolete, and that any money spent on them would only undermine the Space Shuttle's cost-effectiveness." This might be dated better since Beggs was Administrator under Reagan and you've just been discussing events in the early 1970s.
    Moved down to the a better place chronologically. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
More soon.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:30, 9 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry to be so slow. Here's the rest.
  • " Whereas the Chairman of the House Subcommittee on Science, Technology and Space, Congressman Ronnie G. Flippo, whose district in Alabama encompassed the Marshall Space Flight Center, supported the OMB decision." Seems an odd sentence, with the whereas.
    Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • " its experience with Centaur was the greatest of all the NASA centers" I might say "any of" rather than "all"
    Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The cover sported the logo, with the project motto, co-opted from the movie Rocky: "Go for it!"[68]" Are we sure it's Rocky rather than Rocky III?
    The source says: "For the front cover, he combined Ross's symbol with the trite but effective catchphrase from the popular movie Rocky: 'Go for it!'". However, the line appears in Rocky III, which came out in 1982. So, I'm changing it to "Rocky III" (The quote became the catchphrase and theme tune of Rocky V, but that did not come out in 1992.) How do you know these things? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    LOL. Have seen Rocky a few times over the years and was fairly sure the line was not from there. So I googled.--Wehwalt (talk) 13:12, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Centaur was declared to be a payload in 1983, but the backs soon became evident" backs?
    Drawbacks. Accidentally deleted four characters. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The main safety issue involved what would happen in the case of an aborted mission, a failure of the Space Shuttle systems to put them into orbit. In that case, they would have to dump the Centaur's propellant and land. " Who is they/them?
    The crew. Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Centaur team, many of whom witnessed the disaster, were devastated. " I think "were" should be "was" in AmEng.
    Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is it "stop work orders" or "stop-work orders"? And can the mentions be consolidated?
    @Wehwalt: Mentions of what? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Continuity would be improved if you mentioned Lewis's change of name to Glenn.
    Good idea. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:34, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
That's it.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:46, 15 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by Balon Greyjoy[edit]

Like Nick-D, Hawkeye7 requested this review on my talk page. Balon Greyjoy (talk) 17:51, 11 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have; nice work! Balon Greyjoy (talk) 14:24, 17 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Source review[edit]

Notes

References

This version looked at. --Usernameunique (talk) 18:45, 23 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All issues addressed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:00, 23 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gog the Mild & Hawkeye7, it generally looks good. Hawkeye, is there a reason you didn't add the date for 44, 58, 65, 79, and 104? And unless it's someone like Heppenheimer, where it's clear they go by initials, I'd recommend using full names; it can become a real pain trying to figure out who initialed authors are, so you may as well spare an interested reader that trouble. But initials are ultimately a point of preference, and assuming there is an intentional reason for not adding the dates, then I'm signed off on the source review. --Usernameunique (talk) 18:53, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    I don't normally add dates for web pages, as not all of them have them. I've added them here (although one is a guess). In the case of academic papers, the authors are normally referred to in the form of their initials and surnames, that's all there is in the papers except an identification of the institution they work for, and often I don't have any way of finding out what the initials stand for. In the case of (for example) R. E. Martin, all I know is that they worked at General Dynamics in the early 1980s. The interested reader can find the paper simply by clicking on the link. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:10, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Support from TRM[edit]

Lead

Background

That takes me to "Decision to use Shuttle-Centaur", more to come. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:39, 31 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Decision to use...

This is a really good read. I'm up to "Preparations". The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:50, 2 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Preparations

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 19:39, 3 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

An excellent piece of work, gets my support. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:38, 4 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your review. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:39, 4 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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