*There should be no bold text in the lead.
"The third season of 30 Rock ... began on October 30, 2008" - Began to do what?
"This season consisted of 22 episodes." - Has that changed?
"The third season ... was aired on NBC, terrestrial television network in the United States." - There's some sort of grammar problem here.
"The executive producers were series creator Tina Fey, .... and Robert Carlock; Jack Burditt, ... and Ron Weiner acted as co-executive producers." - A period between Robert Carlock and Jack Burditt would do just fine.
"the head writer of a fictitious live-sketch-comedy television series titled TGS with Tracy Jordan (commonly known as TGS)." - The sentence is written as if it was the first mention of TGS, yet you are already using the acronym (or rather half of it). This is extremely weird. Either use the abbreviation given above ("TGS") or write the name out ("The Girlie Show with Tracy Jordan (TGS)").
"trucker hat–wearing" - Use "-" instead of "–".
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- It's right MOS:DASH. The first is a hyphen, the second is an ndash. They look similar in an edit window, but the ndash is visibly longer when rendered in the article. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 16:50, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"Donaghy's full corporate title for the majority of the season is 'Head of East Coast Television and Microwave Oven Programming.'" - Is the period part of the title? If not, move it outside the quotation marks.
"When Digital Video Recorder (DVR) viewers are factored into season three's ratings, an average of 1.2 million viewers has been added to each viewership total." - There's some grammar problem with this sentence.
"gave the season it an A−" - Strike "the season" or "it".
"season 'wildly uneven' and saying 30 Rock was 'merely" - Replace "saying" with "said that".
"Primetime Emmy Award" is linked way too often.
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It is not apparent what source covers the airdates.
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- Then cite that reference after "Original airdate" in the table header. Goodraise 08:05, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"The season was released on DVD by Universal Studios on September 22, 2009 in the United States and Canada after it had completed an initial broadcast run on NBC and is scheduled for Australian release on November 11, 2009." - This is a weird construct. Perhaps split it into multiple sentences?
"In addition to the episodes" - Add a comma right here.
The usage of serial comma is inconsistent throughout the article.
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- "[T]he DVD set included unaired scenes, featurettes, and audio commentary" has the serial comma. "Rachel Yamagata, Talib Kweli and Norah Jones" doesn't. Goodraise 16:17, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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- Further examples: "Kenneth is unhappy with the new page uniforms so Tracy decides to cheer him up with the help of Night Court cast members Harry Anderson, Markie Post and Charlie Robinson." and "Tina Fey is an executive producer, a writer and lead actress." (Stopped searching after finding these two.) Goodraise 08:03, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The table in the DVD release section lacks visual appeal.
- The release date thing bothers me too, but the problem is with an odd number of columns but only 2 release dates you can't divide it very easily. Any ideas? Maybe make the release date table a separate table so it can just get split into 2 cols? Staxringold talkcontribs 16:01, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Perhaps you could cover the release dates in prose? Goodraise 08:31, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- It is covered in the prose, but the style from other lists is for it to be in table. How does this version look (with the dates in a separate table)? Staxringold talkcontribs 13:12, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- The other lists aren't up for review here. (Since the table has been completely turned to prose by Cornucopia (talk · contribs), I will strike this item now.) Goodraise 14:46, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The general references should be formated like references, not like external links.
Reference 22 misuses the work parameter of ((cite web)).
The date format is inconsistent (example: reference 25).
Reference 38 title needs to be title-cased.
Reference 44 misses a publisher (only website name given).
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- A publisher is always an entity (company, person, government, institution, ...). In this case that would appear to be "Guardian News and Media Limited 2009". Goodraise 16:21, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- I think it is okay as is. Strictly the website is the work, and Guardian Media Group is the publisher. However I recall that it shouldn't go in the work field because websites shouldn't be italicised, therefore (personally) I'd just leave it as is, but feel free to shout me down anybody. Additionally we don't usually require a publisher when the work is know and linked. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 16:50, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- That websites shouldn't be italicised is a widespread preference among editors, but not prescribed by the MOS. Personally, I find it an extremely bad practice to stuff information into template parameters that weren't intended to hold that information. As for whether a publisher is required, I always demand it. Knowing the publisher of a source is key information in determining whether the source is reliable. Goodraise 08:28, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The fair-use rational of the infobox image is not convincing.
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- Yes, it's free, but it's not public domain. This comment I'm writing right now is free. That doesn't mean you can do with it whatever you please. It's protected by the CC-BY-SA 3.0 and the GFDL. If you copy it to some other place (like for example another page on Wikipedia) without sufficient attribution for either license, then you're violating my copyright. The bare minimum attribution is a hyperlink or an URL to the page where you got the text. Goodraise 17:05, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The most imporant issue I see is the overly short episode summaries.
Above allegations of copyright violations are also troubling.
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- Well, if you say so. (I wasn't the one who brought it up...) Goodraise 07:45, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Because of all these issues, I have to oppose this nomination. Goodraise 10:53, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"This season consists of 22 episodes." - Referring to the season like this isn't very elegant. Perhaps you could incorporate the episode count into one of the earlier sentences. Goodraise 16:27, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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"The third season was produced by Broadway Video, Little Stranger, and NBC Universal, and was aired on NBC." - No comma before the second "and". Goodraise 17:58, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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"8.7 million viewers, and was the highest" - No comma here. Goodraise 08:03, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"aired on May 14, 2009, and was viewed" - No comma after "2009". Goodraise 08:03, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- "Metacritic gave the pilot a Metascore—a weighted average based on the impression of 17 critical reviews—of 84%." - The number of reviews should not be part of the definition of "Metascore". Also, why is "Metascore" capitalized?
- I'll remove the review count (although it seems like that's useful information), but Metascore is capitalized as a proper and specific noun. Like why you'd capitalize Viagra (using a random link from another list I've been working on). Staxringold talkcontribs 16:01, 22 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- I didn't mean you should remove the count, just that it shouldn't be placed as part of the definition. The way you had it worded originally made it sound as if a weighted average based on the impression of 16 critical reviews would not be a Metascore. As for the capitalization and the Viagra comparasion, "Viagra" is the name of a widely used drug, while "Metascore" is just what Metacritic calls their weighted averages. Personally, I'd avoid the term altogether. Goodraise 08:47, 23 October 2009 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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