*Quick drive-by comment: the photo caption "A photograph of a man with blind (sic) hair" made me chuckle :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:14, 22 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Haha oops, fixed that. Kosack (talk) 05:36, 23 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Even after the fix you still had the alt text showing as the photo caption. I have fixed that for you -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:19, 23 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Comments
- "This chronological list comprises all those who have held the position of manager of the first team of Cardiff City. Each manager's entry includes the dates of tenure and the club's overall competitive record (in terms of matches won, drawn and lost), honours won and significant achievements while under his care. Caretaker managers are included, where known, as well as those who have been in permanent charge." - I would say that this should be immediately above the table, not in the first paragraph of the lead. Obviously this will significantly reduce the lead, but I think it needs beefing up anyway.....
- I used the base of this opening explanation from other FLs such as List of York City F.C. managers and List of Birmingham City F.C. managers, both of which have significantly shorter intros as well. Kosack (talk) 09:20, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Those lists were both promoted quite a while ago (nearly 12 years ago in the case of the York one!) and standards have changed over time. I would say that the lead needs to be more of a summary of the whole article, and the above quoted text should be moved to above the table.... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:43, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: I've moved the opening paragraph to above the table and expanded the lead to a few paragraphs. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 12:19, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- No source for anything before Fred Stewart's arrival
- positioning of ref 5 looks a little odd - why not at the end of the sentence?
- The ref only supports the first half of the sentence. Kosack (talk) 09:10, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- "two years after the cup triumph, Cardiff were" - earlier you had "In 1920, Cardiff was elected" - so is it singular or plural? - fixed
- "Spiers had previously been assistant manager under Frank Buckley at Wolverhampton Wanderers but his move to Cardiff was his first managerial appointment" - no source
- "wages during Wartime" - wartime is not a proper noun, doesn't need a capital
- My phone autocorrect keeps insisting on a capital for some reason, that one slipped through the net. Kosack (talk) 09:15, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- "The board were able to persuade Spiers to rejoin the club and he led a side built around players brought through by his youth system to the First Division in 1952." - no source
- "Morris claimed his only silverware during the 1955–56 season by winning the Welsh Cup but was unable to prevent the club's relegation from the First Division the following year." - no source
- "He left the club in 1958 to manage Swansea Town and was replaced by his assistant Bill Jones who had previously managed Barry Town and Worcester City. Jones led the team back to the First Division in 1960 where they spent two years before being relegated." - no source for any of that
- "winning the Welsh Cup, a feat he achieved seven times during his tenure." - no source
- "He led the team to the semi-final of the competition during the 1967–68 season," - as the most recent competition referred to was the Welsh Cup, this reads like that is the competition being referred to, when it clearly isn't - fixed
- "However, O'Farrell departed after 158 days in charge after being appointed manager of the Iran national side." - no source
- "First team coach Jimmy Andrews took over as caretaker manager......becoming the youngest manager in the club's history at 34."- no source for any of that
- "Morgan was moved into a general manager role" - no source
- "In March 1984, he left the club after being offered the managerial role at Sunderland. " - no source
- "Alan Durban....replaced by Frank Burrows who won promotion in his second season" - no source
- There's clearly a pattern emerging here where large chunks of the text are unsourced. Perhaps you could go through and check/fix the sourcing and I'll then complete the review? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:31, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: Hi, all of the information above is sourced to the ref that immediately follows it. Rather than finish every sentence with the same ref, the ref is listed once it stops providing info or there is a paragraph break. Kosack (talk) 09:08, 25 April 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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