Oppose from Truco
- General
- Alt text, contributors, external and dab links check out fine.
- Lead
- The Boxer Movement or Boxer Rebellion was a Chinese uprising from November 1899 to September 7, 1901, against foreign influence in areas such as trade, politics, religion and technology that occurred in China during the final years of the Manchu rule (Qing Dynasty). --> The Boxer Movement, or Boxer Rebellion, was a Chinese uprising from November 1899 to September 7, 1901, against foreign influence in areas such as trade, politics, religion and technology that occurred in China during the final years of the Manchu rule (Qing Dynasty). (In addition, is there no exact date for November '89?)
- Done I also went through the refs and cannot find a specific start date. They all mention November 1899. --Kumioko (talk) 12:04, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- It began as an anti–foreign, anti–imperialist, peasant–based movement who attacked foreigners who were building railroads and violating Feng shui. -- the first who should be that
- Done --Kumioko (talk) 01:18, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- They also went after Christians they felt were responsible for the foreign domination of China. --> Christians who they felt were responisble for foreign domination of China were also targeted.
- Done--Kumioko (talk) 01:54, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- They also went after Christians they felt were responsible for the foreign domination of China. In June 1900, the Boxers invaded Beijing and killed 230 non–Chinese. -- non-chinese what? invaders? or just in general?
- Just in general, if they lived there and werent chineses they were subject to retaliation. --Kumioko (talk) 12:06, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Before it ended tens of thousands of Chinese Christians, Catholic and Protestants were killed, mostly in the Shandong and Shanxi provinces. -- Comma before tens
- Done --Kumioko (talk) 01:18, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- The government of Empress Dowager Cixi gave her support to the boxers causing foreign diplomats, civilians, soldiers and even some Chinese Christians to retreat to the legation quarter. -- what was the legation quarter (link? explanation?)
- DoneI added a link --Kumioko (talk) 12:08, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- During the Boxer rebellion 59 American servicemen received the Medal of Honor for their actions. -- comma before 59
- Done --Kumioko (talk) 01:54, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Be consistent with numbers, per MOS:NUM. You have instances of digits greater than 10 as fifty-five and 59. (the only exception to spelling out in this case would be for sentences that start with numbers.)
- Done--Kumioko (talk) 01:54, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Add an overall summary and overview of the list, ie. who was the first recipient, last, other notable recipients.
- I would have done this however the recipients for this action received them in groups so there was no first last or middle recipient. Most recieved it for the same days, and the medal was presented on the same days. If you have some suggestion as to some notable thing to call out specifically please let me know. --Kumioko (talk) 14:25, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Table
- The table looks very stretched and some columns don't present the info really well. I would say decrease the size of the notes column and expand columns like the 'place of action'
- I don't understand the problem here. It looks ok on my computer using IE8. --Kumioko (talk) 01:54, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- The use of near doesn't fly by me, unless is it being used by the ref? If so, explain what it means in a footnote and why its not considered in the actual location.
- Not sure why there is a problem with this this one. If you are referring to the near in the table for the locations that is from the reference and I think it describes as accurately as possible where the action took place. If the action didnt take place in the city, then they typically say near. The references usually don't get as specific as saying something like in a wooded field one mile south east of the city of X. They just say near. In some cases other more detailed biographies might get into that detail, but in most cases they don't or it hasn't been done. --Kumioko (talk) 12:14, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref 4 is used a lot, make it a general reference. (See this example)
- Cannot do this - I completely agree with you about the reference issue and in fact I previously only had the reference in theh column of the table to denote that it applied to all. User TomStar protested and required me to change it. Based on this I cannot change this until a consensus has been reached about which is more appropriate. --Kumioko (talk) 01:58, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- That's incorrect, why would the current version be correct? The same reference is used more than 26 times, which is the purpose of the WP:REF#General reference.--Truco 503 02:33, 13 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Further reading
- Is this used as a ref in the article or just a see also type link?--Truco 503 19:09, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes this is just a reference that contains more info about some of the individuals. --Kumioko (talk) 01:54, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- But its not being used to source info in the article right?--Truco 503 02:47, 13 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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