- Comments from KV5
- Remove year links to baseball seasons in prose; per template documentation for ((by)) and ((mlby)), they are to be used only in lists and tables where it is clear their context is not simply a link to a year.
De-linked.
- Cameron has four home runs in a game - no link to this FL in the lede?
Linked.
- "Gene Walter, a Mariner for 1988 season" - missing the - for the 1988 season
Fixed.
- "which he achieved on July 18, 1988" - redundant to say 1988 here when you already said it earlier in the same sentence
Removed 1988.
Linked.
- "during their tenure" - should be tenures since you are referring to multiple players
Pluralized.
- How do my tables differ any from List of Philadelphia Phillies team records, an FL, which I based the article from? Albacore (talk) 22:46, 27 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- They don't differ, but that's an older FL (which I know because I wrote it). The new criteria have more stringent requirements to meet WP:ACCESS. Don't worry, that one will be updated too; updating all of the FLs that I've nominated and had promoted to ACCESS-worthy status is a long-term goal of mine. — KV5 • Talk • 01:01, 28 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- I added scope tags to the columns and captions to the tables. Does this now pass WP:ACCESS? Albacore (talk) 12:30, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- It's a good start. You still need row headers, and now the captions make the table subheaders extraneous, so those can be removed at this time. — KV5 • Talk • 12:33, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Added row headers and removed sub-headers, and replaced colors. Anything else? Albacore (talk) 13:51, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- I don't know why the colors were changed; background colors are much better than text coloring. Right now, the row headers are coded wrong. Since this is a list of records, the "record" column is probably the header, rather than the statistic or the player who holds the record, although there are good arguments for all three. But when using row headers, you can't have everything on one row of code; the header has to be on its own row or the last element in its row. I'll mark up one of the tables as an example. — KV5 • Talk • 16:17, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- OK, the first table and the key are done as examples. You are probably going to want to adjust your colors because they are too dark for backgrounds. I just used the same ones that were there. — KV5 • Talk • 16:31, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good now? Albacore (talk) 18:18, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Yep. — KV5 • Talk • 23:55, 5 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Replace daggers with ((dagger)) and appropriate alt text.
Done.
- Why use a picture of Ichiro in a Japan uniform when there are five-plus pictures of his in his article in a Mariner uniform, most notably this one by the excellent Keith Allison?
Replaced.
- Missing an en-dash in the "Career pitching" table
- Actually there are no en-dashes in the career pitching table. Putting them in makes the years malfit the table. I don't know why that is, they are the only years like that, but I can't find a solution. Albacore (talk) 23:23, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Um... they are all en-dashes except for 2005–present. — KV5 • Talk • 23:28, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Look at the code. Albacore (talk) 23:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- What about the code? Hyphens and en-dashes look identical in monospace font; that doesn't change the fact that they all need to be en-dashes. Hardcode the HTML entity if you've got to. — KV5 • Talk • 00:10, 25 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Albacore (talk) 12:14, 27 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "Mariner's franchise holder" - needs to be record holder and Mariners'
Done.
- "Tied with John Dopson, Rick Honeycutt, Vic Raschi, and Bobby Witt." is a sentence fragment; remove period/full stop at the end
Removed period.
- "Win-loss percentage" should be en-dash, not hyphen
- Done.
- Unspace this en-dash. — KV5 • Talk • 23:28, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- It is unspaced. Looks wrong; probably leaving it as a hyphen would be better. Albacore (talk) 23:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Ugh, no, it is not unspaced. You're using the en-dash template, which forces non-breaking spaces. Use the en-dash that's provided in the toolbox. And leaving it as a hyphen wouldn't be better because it's contrary to MOS:DASH. — KV5 • Talk • 00:53, 26 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Albacore (talk) 12:14, 27 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hope these comments help. — KV5 • Talk • 19:49, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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