Oppose/Review by Truco (talk · contribs)
- Lead
- Juniper was founded by Pradeep Sindhu,[2][3] Dennis Ferguson, and Bjorn Liencres in February 1996. -- (1)No need for the names to be in italics (2)What's verifying the other people?
- [TC] : Removed italics, added more references to the other founders also. [/TC]
- The company was subsequently reincorporated in Delaware on March 1998 in and went public on the 25th of June, 1999. -- (1)Remove the in before and went (2)Comma before and (3)Per MOS:DATE, the date should be formatted as 25 June, 1999 or June 25, 1999.
- [TC]: Fixed [/TC]
- NetScreen had acquired Neoteris prior to this acquisition.Unisphere, before the Juniper acquisition, was initially comprised of three other key networking equipment manufacturers such as Redstone Communications, Argon Networks, Castle Networks. -- (1)space between the period (2)The such as should be replaced with a colon
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Siemens had bought Castle Networks, for $300 million in 1999, and then combined it with two other acquisitions to form the Unisphere Networks. -- remove the comma
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- The names of the companies should not be in italics
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- The lead needs more transitions from each acquistion to the other, right now its really boring to read.
- [TC] : Can you help in this one? [/TC]
- Transitions like then later on afterwards --Best, ₮RUCӨ 01:10, 21 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Links should be linked the first time they appear, not after the first time they appear, like the Siemens link
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- [TC] : Fixed. Removed wilikink to US. Rest due to the template ((USA)) : United States [/TC]
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Juniper has acquired over 11 companies till date. -- till date is wrong grammar, and what you are trying to say is WP:WEASEL talk, give an exact time period (date)
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Juniper has officially released the financial details for most of these mergers and acquisitions. -- this list has no mergers
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Acquisitions
- The business column should not sort because there are more than one entries in some cells.
- [TC] : How to disallow sort on a particular column? [[/TC]
- References
- Ref # 3 is missing a publisher
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Ref # 4 is inaccurately formatted, the language field should not have what it currently haves and its missing a publisher
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- What makes masshightech.com reliable?
- [TC]: Fixed. Replaced with alternate references [/TC]
- This publisher is also inconsistently formatted.
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
- Some refs have publishers of Juniper inconsistently formatted, it should be Juniper Networks or Juniper Networks, Inc.
- [TC] : Fixed. All to 'Juniper Networks' [/TC]
- Many refs actually are missing publishers and are inconsistently formatted.
- [TC] : Fixed [/TC]
--₮RUCӨ 02:55, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed most of the suggestions. How do I disallow sort on a particular column only ? Can you help me for "The lead needs more transitions from each acquistion to the other, right now its really boring to read." This is my first FLC. Thanks a lot for the kind review -- Tinu Cherian - 12:14, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Lead
- Unisphere, before the Juniper acquisition, was initially comprised of three other key networking equipment manufacturers : Redstone Communications, Argon Networks, Castle Networks. -- the semi-colon should not have a space before it
- Juniper made most number of its acquisitions in 2005. -- add the before "most number"
- Juniper has acquired over 11 companies till November 2005. -- best stated as Since November 2005, Juniper has acquired over 11 companies.
- [TC] : done. "Since November 1999" ?
- Table
- To make a particular column unsortable, use the same coding that made the ref column unsortable !class="unsortable"|
- Juniper Networks, Inc. M&A Summary
- The section header needs to be renamed to Juniper Networks, Inc. acquisitions summary
- "Juniper Networks, Inc. has made 11 acquisitions while it did not take stake in any companies. Juniper has made 1 divestitures till date." -- (1)Reword the first sentence to Juniper Networks, Inc. has made 11 acquisitions, though it has not taken stake in any companies.
- References
- I'm sorry, but the since this list mentions the Juniper Networks as Juniper Networks, Inc. (it needs to be as such in the references)
- [TC] : done. Changed all corresponding references publisher to "Juniper Networks, Inc."
- Ref # 7|The work is from Google, while the publisher is Juniper Networks, Inc.
- [TC] : The work is an orginal press release by Juniper. The URL is changed ( or content removed/archived ?). This content is just a cache by the Search engine operator Google.
- Ref # 10|No need for the URL of the NYT publisher
- Ref # 13|Properly format the publisher, it should not be in all lower case
- Ref # 15|is still missing a publisher
- Ref # 20|is missing a publisher
- What makes network world reliable? In addition, the publisher should not be in all lower case
- What makes securitypronews.com reliable? In addition, the publisher should be the name of the company who runs the site not the URL
- [TC] : done. Looks reliable. Saw many articles in WP referenced to this website. should always publisher to be the holding company or the owner ? Even The San Francisco Chronicle/sfgate.com is owned by Hearst Communications Inc. . It is better to leave as the popular name in some cases.
- What makes ITwire reliable? In addition, the publisher should be the name of the company who runs the site not the URL
- [TC] : Looks reliable.Reference is uncontroversial. btw saw many articles in WP referenced to this website.
- What makes xchange mag reliable? In addition, the publisher should be the name of the company who runs the site not the URL
- [TC] : see comments above.
--₮RUCӨ 20:36, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Made the changes. See the purged page. -- Tinu Cherian - 06:05, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Now there is an inconsistency with the linking of publishers, either remove the links or add links to all publishers that have articles on WP. In addition, there is still an overlink of US dollars in the lead, and why is acquisition linked so late in the prose and not earlier?--₮RUCӨ 23:18, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- [TC] : done.Wikilinks to publishers that have WP articles are added. Only one wikilink to Juniper references to avoid over linking.
- I'll support when the sourcing issue is resolved below, and my comment above about transitions.--Best, ₮RUCӨ 01:10, 21 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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