Comments Looks like a terrific piece of work. These are my comments.
- The lead image needs alt text.
- Also, I think its caption could do with being rewritten slightly – it seems odd to me that "The Last Judgment" doesn't link to either The Last Judgment (Memling) or Last Judgement. Perhaps something like "The Last Judgment by painter Hans Memling. In Christian belief, the Last Judgement is an apocalyptic event where God makes a final judgement of all people on Earth." would work.
- A lot of dates are written in "yyyy mmm dd" and "yyyy mmm" formats. MOS:DATEFORMAT specifically discourages these formats.
- Notes that are single, incomplete sentences (e.g. "Declared that the world.."; "Revised date from Stöffler..."; "Predicted that the Apocalypse..."; "Predicted the end of the world...") don't need terminating periods.
- Some links may be WP:OVERLINKED. For example, I don't think you need to wikilink Harold Camping or William Miller so frequently. Millennialism is wikilinked 15 times.
- Also per WP:OVERLINK, major geographical locations such as London don't need to be wikilinked.
- "20,000 Londoners". Per MOS:NUMNOTES, rewrite this as "Twenty thousand Londoners".
- That [who?] tag needs to be dealt with.
- Citations needs to occur in ascending order, e.g. [120][94] -> [94][120]
- Some online sources are missing access dates, e.g. 4, 5, 6, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12. There may be more.
- Oh, that's deliberate. I've previously been told at FAC its redundant to have an access date and an archived version of a website. I was told the archived version defeats the purpose of knowing when the site was last accessed. Ever since I was told this I've stopped adding accessdates to websites that I've archived, but I never bothered to remove them from the references I already added. I've removed them now so that it's consistent.
- Citation 81 and 91's dates are in dmy format.
- Wikilinks that already appear in the main body of the article (i.e. Armageddon, End time and Second Coming) don't need to be repeated in the See Also section.
- Speaking of the SA section, Apocalypse doesn't appear in the main body, but it certainly feels like it should. Perhaps "apocalyptic events" could link to it in the opening sentence?
- WP:ISBN suggests using 13-digit ISBNs where available. For the Grosso and Snow books, these would be 978-0-8356-0734-6 and 978-0-275-98052-8 respectively.
- Extra }s at the end of the Schwartz ref.
- Spaced hyphens ( - ) need to be spaced en dashes ( – ).
- "A list of apocalyptic predictions". Just "Apocalyptic predictions" would be fine. Consider adding a bullet point as well.
Incidentally, my current open FLC is FHM's 100 Sexiest Women (UK). If you've got the time, I welcome any comments on it. Thanks, A Thousand Doors (talk | contribs) 11:11, 16 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Per MOS:QWQ, that "battle" in the 1914 Charles Taze Russell description really needs to be 'battle'.
- "Son of the former Prime Minister of Britain...". Per WP:EGG, this may be better written as, say, "Son of Spencer Perceval, the former Prime Minister of Britain..." or similar.
- As major geographical locations, India and Uganda don't need to be wikilinked. Herbert W. Armstrong and Edgar C. Whisenant also don't need to be wikilinked so close together.
- Per MOS:NBSP, stick some non-breaking spaces within million or billion numbers, i.e.
16 million -> 16 million , 27 million -> 27 million , etc. Similarly, 10:00 am -> 10:00 am
- "would occur on May 21, 2011" -> "would occur on May 21, 2011
- "none of these events were". I believe that "none of these events was" is correct.
- The dates in the Date (CE) columns are in dmy format, while the dates in the Description columns are in mdy format. Either's fine, but they need to be consistent throughout the article.
A Thousand Doors (talk | contribs) 16:00, 28 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
|