• Image could use alt text (I couldn't seem to see any).
  • It's there, you musn't have been looking very hard! Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• Reinforce "association football" in the lead (so our American/Canadian/Australian readers aren't dreadfully confused....)
  • Done, despite my dislike for the usage of this particular seldom-used term... Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• "Later that year York were elected" would be better to say "Later that year, the club were..." as the last mention of York was of the city itself, not the club.
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• I wonder, do we have a suitable article to link to for election in this regard?
  • Apparently not. However, this gives a description of the election process. Do you think that'd be worth linking? Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
    • I think that looks like a good link. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:24, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
      • Added. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:31, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• "Relegation to the Football Conference occurred in 2004 after York" make it active rather than passive, i.e. "York were relegated to ... after they finished.."
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• Just a question, you say "first competitive league game was " did they play any other kind of league game?
  • Nope, have removed "competitive" as it seems redundant. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• "are correct as of the match played on 28 April 2012." would it be cleaner to say "as of the end of the 2011-12 season"?
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• Key, switch bullet three and four so it matches the order of the columns.
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• Probably also switch the last two bullet points to become the first two bullet points.
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• Not sure you need " pp. 232–410." in the general ref since you kindly specify page ranges specifically later on.
  • Little confused, whereabouts are these page ranges? Within refs 1-4? In any case, the Batters ref is one of the two being used to cite the content within the table, so would it not be best to specify the page ranges? Mattythewhite (talk) 18:15, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
    • "Batters, Dave (2008). York City The Complete Record. Breedon Books. pp. 232–410. ISBN 978-1-85983-633-0." you don't need the page range here because each time you ref Batters, you give a more specific page range. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:24, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
      • Removed. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:31, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:53, 29 June 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]

These are nitpicky comments as I'm struggling to find faults with the list:

• Personally I would include the season in the wikilink when you link seasons
  • It's personal preference but I tend not to include "season" in the wikilink; I think the season range only being linked is sufficient as that's what is specifically being referred to, not the "season" bit. Mattythewhite (talk) 23:56, 6 July 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]
• "the club's first and only league title." not sure you need the first, only would imply they've won one
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 23:56, 6 July 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]

NapHit (talk) 20:32, 6 July 2012 (UTC)Reply[reply]