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Not promoted - please nominate only when you have time to respond to issues with the article, ok? :-/ —Ed 17 (Talk / Contribs) 02:22, 24 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Battle of Marion[edit]

Just passed a GA. I'd like to go for A and maybe FA soon. edMarkViolinistDrop me a line 19:18, 21 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - Just a few points I noticed:

 Done edMarkViolinistDrop me a line 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
 Done edMarkViolinistDrop me a line 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:47, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Added most of them. edMarkViolinistDrop me a line 18:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
And I've done three more. --ROGER DAVIES talk 04:50, 25 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

  • I've ((fixbunching))'d some stuff and added a fact tag for you to cite.
  • "John C. Breckinridge—former Vice-President of the United States, and also candidate for U.S. President in 1860—the commander..." Rephrase this, maybe something like "John C. Breckinridge, the former Vice-President of the United States and Southern Democratic candidate for President in [[United States Presidential Election, 1860|the 1860 election]]."
  • "Most of the companies had been transferred to the Army of Northern Virginia to help in the defense of Richmond.[10]" This is confusing, does it mean most of Breckinridge's command had been transferred?
  • "who stopped just so they could fire a volley into the Union cavalry." Why would they stop "just" to shoot at the enemy? That is what is normally done in war, after all.
  • "After repelling a final charge," Does this mean another one after the charge just described, or the charge you just mentioned? Please clarify.
  • The map of Stoneman's advance and the picture of the hill sandwich on my laptop, please move one of them.
  • "Breckinridge ordered his field officers to inspect the troops and to report back with the condition of his troops." Saying troops too many times in a sentence, perhaps "Breckinridge ordered his field officers to inspect and report back on the condition of his troops."
None of these should be difficult to fix, so please do so and it will, in my opinion, meet the criteria. – Joe Nutter 19:06, 30 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • It would be good if you could get rid of the fact tag placed in the infobox.
  • The Union forces consisted of about 4,500 men from a variety of different units, including several units which had participated in smaller-scale raids into Southwest Virginia earlier in the conflict. - this needs a ref.
  • On December 14, the Union regiments began to push Duke's cavalry back toward Abingdon, Virginia. The next day, Stoneman and his cavalry went into camp at Glade Spring, Virginia, which was approximately 13 miles (21 km) west of Marion. - needs ref.
  • Current ref. number 9 lacks accessdate and other additional information. --Eurocopter (talk) 20:04, 17 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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