12:1212:12, 1 October 2023diffhist−7
Ed Norris
→NYPD career: changed "the most dramatic decrease in crime" [compared to what? seems confusing] to the more readable "a dramatic decrease in crime"Tags: Mobile editMobile web editAdvanced mobile edit
16:2816:28, 8 August 2023diffhist+75
The Power Broker
I've softened the phrasing on this rework, but the original version was straight-up hard to read and borderline ungrammatical; I think this works better