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Nominator: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 01:49, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: BigLordFlash (talk · contribs) 12:27, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
"perform a song"to "perform songs": Pluralized "song" to match the context where multiple songs are played.
"get": "Achieve" is more formal and fits better in this context.
"Each song has four different instruments"to "Each song features four different instruments": "Features" is more descriptive and polished.
"difficulty of the song"to "song's difficulty": Shortened for readability.
"Higher difficulties changing the layouts of songs"to "Higher difficulties change the layouts of the songs": Corrected the tense and clarified the sentence.
"as a part of the Fortnite launcher"to "as part of the Fortnite launcher": "As part of" is more commonly used.
"Since release"to "Since its release": Clarified "release" to specify the game.
"have released, which change the games promotional material to be themed around a specific featured artist"to "have been introduced, each themed around a specific featured artist": Simplified for clarity.
"allowed the usage of guitar controllers"to "allowed the use of guitar controllers": "Use" is more straightforward.
"built with the controllers in mind"to "designed with these controllers in mind": "Designed" is more formal and precise.
"Fortnite Festival received mixed reviews from critics, with criticism toward the price of songs as well as the gameplay"to "Fortnite Festival received mixed reviews from critics, who criticized the price of songs and the gameplay": Combined sentences and made the critique more direct.
"The player is able to choose"to "The player can choose": Simplified wording.
"respectfully"to "respectively": Corrected the term.
"and when playing them attempt"to "and attempts": Corrected subject-verb agreement.
"with the players score and combo multiplier increasing the more inputs one gets correct"to "Players' scores and combo multipliers increase with accurate inputs": Simplified and clarified the sentence.
"difficulty options"to "difficulty levels": "Levels" is more commonly used in this context.
"utilizing a different type of note, "hammer-on and pull-off.""to "including "hammer-on and pull-off" notes": Clarified the sentence structure.
"the multipliers will stack"to "the multipliers stack": Simplified for readability.
"serve as"instead of "is used as": More concise.
"The versions of the songs used in this mode are known as "Jam Loops", and are also playable"to "The versions of the songs used in this mode are known as "Jam Loops" and are also playable": Removed unnecessary comma.
"being composed": The use of "being" is unnecessary and slightly awkward in this context.
"are provided to the player": Should use "is" to match the singular subject "selection."
"the player": Repetition can be avoided by using a pronoun.
"has a price of": Can be simplified to "costs."
"are able to": Can be simplified to "can."
"are themed around": This is correct, but for parallelism, the second part of the sentence needs to match this plural form.
"adjusts": Should be "adjust" to match the plural "seasons."
"to be based around them": Can be simplified and clarified to "accordingly."
"song": Should be plural "songs" for consistency.
"though made": Awkward phrasing; can be rephrased for clarity.
"Fender branded": Should be hyphenated as "Fender-branded."
"Rigopolous": Should be "Rigopulos" for the correct spelling.
"whilst": "While" is more common in American English.
"released on": Should be "was released on."
"to added": Should be "to be added."
"had supplied": "Had" is unnecessary.
"for": Should be "with" to match "compatible with."
"pointing it out as being": Can be simplified to "pointing out it was."
"with little difference": Awkward phrasing; better as "with few differences."
"found the game be unenjoyable": Should be "found the game to be unenjoyable."
"a great introduction": Should be "as a great introduction."
"as": Should be "to" for correct comparison (thoughts similar to Taylor's and Dustin's).
"towards": Should be "toward."
"was negative": Should be "were negative" to match the plural "responses."
"from the game": Better phrased as "to the game."
"to a": Should be "to be a."
"was effected negatively": Should be "was negatively affected."
"the lack of interactivity": Unnecessary article "the."
Based on this version
It's a very well written article, without any problems, and meets the criteria for Good Article. I will pass this one. Congratulations! BigLordFlashtalk 10:31, 27 July 2024 (UTC)