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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs ) 13:17, 4 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk ) 13:17, 4 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
The only duplicated link is DSO in the lede, which can probably be kept
No edit wars
Image is correctly licenced
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely Suggest adding his middle name to the lede Move night-fighter link to first mention in lede Suggest adding how/when he got the DFC to the lede Service number can be added to infobox from London Gazette Ref. #4 seems to link to the wrong newspaper article, it discusses his DFC not his education Can you provide any dates for the education? "Jameson received his flight training" "Posted to No. 125 Squadron" based where? "in November he was awarded..." this sentence needs a rejig, doesn't work later on "with the assistance of radar Jameson shot up" How exactly is radar helping him shoot an aircraft engine? Did it perhaps tell him where the aircraft was? Do we know which OTU it was? A more particular date would be useful for the OTU, you've leaving me to guess anywhere between February and December! "Norman Crookes" give Crookes his rank if possible - would be useful to mention somewhere that both his planes are double seaters "A Ju 88 was destroyed" this doesn't actually make it clear that Jameson was the one to do the destroying Temporary situation or temporary station? "This second Ju 88" technically this is the third Ju 88 "he was able to score hits" "a Ju 88 was destroyed over Avranches" again, not made clear this is Jameson's work "September 1944" repeated year "The same month..." too much "sortie" in this sentence! Give the acres number a conversion, probably to hectares? "memorabilia" seems a little tacky, could you describe it better? Repeat earlier cmt about ref. #4 Other references look ok, AGF with print sources@Zawed : Hi, that's all I have for now. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk ) 20:38, 9 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
Pickersgill-Cunliffe thanks for the detailed review, I have responded to your various comments as above. Cheers, Zawed (talk ) 08:15, 10 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
@Zawed : Edits look good. A few final points:
Either "two-seater De Havilland Mosquitos" or "the two-seater De Havilland Mosquito"
You don't mention any of his ranks before flight lieutenant, it would be useful if you can provide at least one of them
I've added his rank at the time of the DFC being awarded since the preamble to LG citation refers to this. Unfortunately, I don't know when he was commissioned as a pilot officer. Zawed (talk ) 21:46, 10 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
That's all I've got. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk ) 19:52, 10 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
Thanks, responded as above. Cheers, Zawed (talk ) 21:46, 10 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]
@Zawed : Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk ) 01:51, 11 December 2022 (UTC) [ reply ]