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A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Because there are so few citations in the article, I will spot-check all that I can from this version:
1a: The opening three sentences are almost identical to the source, the latter two sentences especially. This is clear WP:CLOP, and needs rephrasing.
Done Rephrased
1b: The source does not say that the support of the Tagore family was financial, that more than one member of the family recited poetry, or that any member sang songs.
I've added a source that says that the help was financial (in Bengali). Wrt to the rest of that statement, it is inferred from the rest of the article, (Satyendranath, Rabindranath (and Dwijendranath to a certain extent) are known to have performed and composed songs, poems and given speeches in the fair during this time period based on Mukhopadhyay and the other sources). There isn't a source that makes this specific statement however, and I can remove this if you insist.
1c Despite being too young to participate during the founding years of the mela is not supported by the source. The third sentence is too close for comfort to the source. The fourth sentence spills over onto p. 31.
Again, the youngness feels like a reasonable assumption to make. Tagore's age would have been 7 when the mela started (this is not me speculating and is corroborated by a few sources) :) Maybe this needs rewriting somehow ?
1d good
2: cannot access the source
3a the article's presentation of the prospectus title is considerably different from the source, where it is simply called "Prospectus of a Society". The article also seems to omit Basu's role in the founding of the mela, instead relegating him to the role of "inspiration", whereas according to the source: "the main planner was Rajnarayan Basu." I also do not see the "National Society" in the source.
I've added a source which provides more context and clarified Basu's role.
3b WP:CLOP is again present: After three years, due to the untimely death of Ganendranath, Dwijendranath Tagore took over the post of secretary... In addition to this, Dwijendranath also presided over the 8th and 10th annual conferences. is just too close to the source.
3c, d, and e (I'll address these together as they're next to each other): again, very close to WP:CLOP. Phrases such as promote fraternity amongst Indians and work towards the upliftment of the country are nearly identical to the source. The second paragraph is better than the first, though.
I've removed that exact wording and expanded the text to more closely align with the original organizer's POV based on a Bengali source.
4 not supported by the source
Done Fixed.
5 can't access
Done Added a few sources to support the statements
"mela" translates to "fair" or "festival" both of which are mentioned in the lede
A good idea with short articles like this is to try to support each sentence with multiple sources. Not only does this reduce the risk of close paraphrasing (see above) but it produces clearer writing in general.
I've tried adding in a few sources, however, a lot of the more comprehensive sources are eithier offline or are written in Bengali (and refer to the same mela with different names and spellings) making them hard to track down.
Overall
Sohom Datta, the sourcing issues with this are considerable, especially the close paraphrasing. It is in fact eligible for quickfailing, under 1) and 2) of the QF criteria. However, I am conscious of the length of the GA queue, and so will put this nomination on hold for seven days; if the issues are not fixed by 4 February, I will fail the nomination. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 00:19, 28 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
AirshipJungleman29 I've gone ahead and made a few changes and left comments regarding a few. Let me know if more changes are required. Sohom (talk) 19:06, 28 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sohom Datta, the article is in a much better state; I have done a thorough copyedit to focus on prose clarity and concision (GA criterion 1a)) and to avoid a WP:FIXLOOP. A couple of points still remain, relating to Rabindranath Tagore. Yes, unless "Despite being too young to participate during the founding years of the mela" is explicitly stated somewhere, it should be cut—six years old is not too young to be a participant in a festival. The sentence It was there that he was first exposed to anti-British sentiments, which shaped his beliefs later in life. is also now out of place, as the previous sentence describes him reciting a poem. You might also want to outline the relationships between the different Tagore family members in the article. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 22:03, 31 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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