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Some proposed changes[edit]

First suggestion:

Second suggestion:

Third suggestion:

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 16:22, 19 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 19-DEC-2018

  Edit request declined  

  1. The proposed text in the edit request was found to be insufficiently paraphrased from the source material. All submitted text must be in an editor's own words and phrasing, per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.
  2. Already existing text in the current version of the article was also found to be insufficiently paraphrased from the source material. This text has been deleted from the article. Both instances, from the request and the article itself, are listed below.

Please re-write your proposal so that it is properly paraphrased, and feel free to re-submit that request at your earliest convenience.
Regards,  Spintendo  17:55, 19 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comparison of texts
As it appears in
the edit request
As it appears in
the source material
...the organisation’s members wield in excess of 12% of the digital recorded music market and embody more than 20,000 independent record labels and distributors from 57 countries. The organisation’s members command in excess of 12% of the digital recorded music market and embody more than 20,000 independent record labels and distributors from 57 countries.[1]
Merlin members’ repertoire commanded a 25% higher market share on the paid tiers of streaming services in comparison with their free tiers. Meanwhile 68% of Merlin members reported that the majority of their digital income comes from streaming. Independent music enjoys a 25% higher market share on paid streaming accounts versus free. A total of 68% of Merlin members now report that the majority of their digital income comes from streaming.[2]
Comparison of texts
As it appears in
the Merlin Network
Wikipedia article
As it appears in
the source material
Merlin Network is the global digital rights agency for the world's independent label sector Merlin is the global digital rights agency for the world’s independent label sector.[3]
...to allow digital services the opportunity to globally license – via a single deal, instead of hundreds of individual local deals – commercially successful independent music labels from across the world. ... allowing the opportunity to globally license - via a single deal, instead of hundreds of individual local deals –the world’s most important and commercially successful independent music labels.[3]
Merlin is owned and controlled by a not-for-profit foundation, supervised by a member-elected board of 15 individuals - five each from North America, Europe and Rest of the World. Merlin is owned and controlled by a not-for-profit foundation, supervised by a member-elected board representing the wider independent label community...this board consists of 15 members - five each from North America, Europe and Rest of the World.[3]
The organisation operates on a non-exclusive basis, and its stated remit is to “enhance the value of our members rights in deals that cannot be easily negotiated locally or individually, or are not covered adequately by existing arrangements.” We operate on a non-exclusive basis, and complement and enhance our members’existing digital business. Our remit is to enhance the value of our members rights in deals that cannot be easily negotiated locally or individually, or are not covered adequately by existing arrangements.[4]

References

  1. ^ "Merlin Network - Representing the rights of independent record labels worldwide". www.merlinnetwork.org.
  2. ^ "Merlin indie label members seeing rapid streaming growth, report finds - Complete Music Update".
  3. ^ a b c "Merlin Network - Representing the rights of independent record labels worldwide". www.merlinnetwork.org.
  4. ^ "Merlin Network - Representing the rights of independent record labels worldwide". www.merlinnetwork.org.

07-JAN-2019[edit]

Thanks Spintendo for the reply and explanation. I have now made the requested edits and paraphrased the text. Please see below and please let me know if there is anything I can do to improve for next time. Thanks!

First suggestion - changes to second paragraph:

Second suggestion - additions to last paragraph:

Third suggestion - new paragraph addition:

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 14:45, 7 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

Under the |client= parameter of the disclose template it states "Name PR". Please clarify the name of this group which is paying for these edits. Thank you  Spintendo  21:33, 24 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Name PR is the PR agency that is hired by and represents Merlin Network. Merlin Network is a client of Name PR. I am an employee of Name PR. For more information on Name PR, you can see their website.Dom Athanassiou (talk) 11:59, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 28-JAN-2019

  Unable to review edit request  
Your edit request could not be reviewed because the provided references are not formatted correctly.[a] The citation style predominantly used by the Merlin Network article is Citation Style 1 (CS1). The citation style used in the edit request consists of bare URL's.[b] Any requested edit of yours which may be implemented will need to resemble the current style already in use in the article – in this case, CS1.[c] (See WP:CITEVAR.) In the extended section below titled Citation style, I have illustrated two examples: one showing how the edit request was submitted, and another showing how requests should be submitted in the future:

Citation style
Bare URL reference formatting:

The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles,<ref>https://www.booksource.com</ref> while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.<ref>https://www.journalsource.com</ref> The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.<ref>https://www.websource.com</ref>

Displays as:

The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles,[1] while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.[2] The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.[3]


References


1. https://www.booksource.com
2. http://www.journalsource.com
3. http://www.websource.com

In the example above there are three URL's provided with the claim statements, but these URL's have not been placed using Citation Style 1, which is the style predominantly used by the Merlin Network article. Using this style, the WikiFormatted text would resemble the following:

Citation Style 1 formatting:

The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles,<ref>((cite book|last1=Sjöblad|first1=Tristan|title=The Sun|url=http://www.booksource.com|publisher=Academic Press|date=2018|page=1))</ref> while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.<ref>((cite journal|last1=Duvalier|first1=Gabrielle|title=Size of the Moon|journal=Scientific American|issue=78|volume=51|url=http://www.journalsource.com|date=2018|page=46))</ref> The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.<ref>((cite web|last1=Uemura|first1=Shu|title=The Sun's Heat|url=http://www.websource.com|publisher=Academic Press|date=2018|page=2))</ref>

Displays as:

The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles,[1] while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.[2] The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.[3]

References


  1. ^ Sjöblad, Tristan. The Sun. Academic Press, 2018, p. 1.
  2. ^ Duvalier, Gabrielle. "Size of the Moon", Scientific American, 51(78):46.
  3. ^ Uemura, Shū. The Sun's Heat. Academic Press, 2018, p. 2.

In the example above the references have been formatted according to Citation Style 1, which shows the author, the source's name, date, etc., all information which is lost when only the links are provided. As Wikipedia is a volunteer project, larger edit requests such yours are generally expected to have this formatting done before the request is submitted for review.

Kindly rewrite your edit request so that it aligns more with the second example shown in the collapsed section above, and feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience.[c] If you have any questions about this formatting please don't hesitate to ask myself or another editor. Regards,  Spintendo  11:51, 28 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

  1. ^ The fault for this formatting error most likely originates with the automated prompts used by the edit request template. These prompts ask a COI editor to "supply the URL of any references used". While the resulting omission of information is not the fault of the requesting COI editor, it nevertheless remains their responsibility to supply the references formatted in the style used by the article.
  2. ^ The use of bare URLs as references is a style which is acceptable for use in Wikipedia. However, general practice dictates that the style already in use for an article be the one that is subsequently used for all future additions unless changed by editorial consensus.[1]
  3. ^ a b Of the three sections proposed to be added, only the first section need be corrected, as the information in the second and third sections can't be added. The reason for this is that these sections contain non-notable awards and promotional phrasing, which would be declined irregardless of whichever citation style were used.

References

  1. ^ "WP:CITEVAR - Wikipedia:Citing sources". Wikipedia. 20 October 2018. Retrieved 22 October 2018. It is normal practice to defer to the style used by the first major contributor or adopted by the consensus of editors already working on the page, unless a change in consensus has been achieved. If the article you are editing is already using a particular citation style, you should follow it.

Reply 29-JAN-2019[edit]

@Spintendo: Thanks for the feedback, really appreciate your help. I have rewritten the edit request as described in your comment but would be great if you can have a look below before I submit. With regards to point c in your notes above, can we add the year '2018' to the last paragraph so that the information is up-to-date (see second suggestion below)?

Also, regarding the first suggestion, I wanted to point out that the list of members not found in the source below (2) can also be found here. I appreciate that it is better to use one source for all if possible, so wasn't sure how it's best to reference this as the source on the current version of the article also does not include all the members mentioned (Phonofile and Amadea Music are not Merlin Network members for example). Additionally, I used a primary source based on the criteria that a self-published source is not always automatically invalid. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dom Athanassiou (talk • contribs) 15:23, 30 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]


First suggestion - changes to second paragraph:

Second suggestion - addition to second sentence in last paragraph:

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 16:09, 29 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

Reply 31-JAN-2019

  1. Regarding WP:USINGSPS I don't recall raising that issue with any of your proposals for this article. If I'm mistaken please advise.
  2. Regarding the first suggestion I think an embedded list of these members would work better than prose here, per MOS:EMBED.[a]
  3. Regarding the second suggestion, the designation Independent Champion and the Libera Awards are not notable subjects with their own articles in Wikipedia. This has been taken as a prerequisite to mentioning these types of laudits in corporation articles in order to prevent obscure award mentions.[a]

Regards,  Spintendo  15:26, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

  1. ^ a b The requested information appears to already exist in the article as of this posting, so it's not immediately clear why this would be part of an edit request.
Thanks for explaining, Spintendo. I will re-submit the edit request now based on your answers. The main purpose of the edit request is to remove any labels or distributors mentioned in the article that are not in the public domain as Merlin Network members (such as Vohnic Music LLC, Artists Network Revolution, Spare Music, Amadea Music, Phonofile) and replace them with ones that are. Dom Athanassiou (talk) 16:48, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Updated Edit Request[edit]

As per my conversation with Spintendo above, I would like to submit the following edit requests.

First suggestion - changes to second paragraph:

Second suggestion - new section:

Merlin Network members include:

Altafonte Distribution[3] Armada Music[4]
Beggars Group[5] Curb Records[6]
Domino Recording Company[7] Eleven Seven Music[8]
Entertainment One Music[9] Epitaph Records[10]
Hopeless Records[11] INgrooves[12]
!K7[13] Kobalt Label Services/AWAL[14]
Mad Decent[15] Merge Records[16]
Naxos Records[17] Ninja Tune[18]
PIAS Group[19] Redeye Worldwide[20]
Secretly Group[21] Symphonic Distribution[22]
Sub Pop[23] WARP Records[24]

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 18:06, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

  1. ^ Allen, Katie. "Indie music labels join together to grab a slice of online revenues". The Guardian.
  2. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  3. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  4. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  5. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  6. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  7. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  8. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  9. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  10. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  11. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  12. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  13. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  14. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  15. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  16. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  17. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  18. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  19. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  20. ^ "Merlin Board". Merlin Network.
  21. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  22. ^ "Merlin Opens Office in Tokyo". Symphonic Blog.
  23. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.
  24. ^ "Mixcloud And Merlin Network Announce Direct Licensing Deal". Merlin Network.

Reply 31-JAN-2019

  1. The information has been presented in ((wikitable)) form. When two or less elements are used per entry (per line or box) the use of a list is preferred over the use of a table.[a] As this collection of information contains only one entry per line (the name of the company) please modify the entries to make use of a list as opposed to a table. (See Help:List for more information about lists.[b])
  2. Please ensure that when a reference is used more than once, the template's name parameter is used to utilize one entry with multiple ref tags.

Regards,  Spintendo  18:16, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

  1. ^ This aligns with the recommendation from my previous post, which mentioned using a list, not a table.
  2. ^ I would suggest a multi-column bulleted list.

1-FEB-2019[edit]

Please see revised edit request below.

First suggestion - changes to second paragraph:

Second suggestion - new section:

Merlin Network members include:

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 11:07, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

Reply 1-FEB-2019

  Edit request implemented  

  1. The list was implemented.[a]
  2. The section requested to be removed was done so.
  3. The requested new text was not added because the text was insufficiently paraphrased from the source material. All additions to the article need to be placed in an editors own words and phrasing, per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE. Nevertheless, the figures were updated.

Regards,  Spintendo  13:33, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

  1. ^ All except the claim regarding Symphonic Distribution, which requires an additional source. The provided source only indicates that an office was opened in Tokyo.
@Spintendo: Thanks for implementing the changes. Would it be possible to slightly change the wording of the second sentence in the article?

Thanks, and have a great weekend. Dom Athanassiou (talk) 16:51, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Copyright problem removed[edit]

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Adding new reference & wording change[edit]

@Justlettersandnumbers:

Thanks for reviewing the page and cleaning it up so that it complies with Wiki policies.

I found a reference for the third sentence in the first paragraph that is not a press release. I also suggest that the wording changes slightly. Please see below.

References

  1. ^ Christman, Ed. "Merlin Primed to Reach $500 Million in Annual Collections for Indie Label Members". Billboard. ((cite web)): Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 10:37, 6 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

1-MAY-2019[edit]

Thanks for your help so far. In addition to the proposed change from February, I’d like to propose some additional changes. Please see the complete list of changes below.

First suggestion - changes to first paragraph:

Second suggestion - changes to list of principal member labels:

References

  1. ^ "No. 81: Charles Caldas, Power 100". Billboard. ((cite web)): Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 11:04, 1 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 1-MAY-2019

  Edit request partially implemented  

  1. Green tickY INgrooves was removed.
  2. Green tickY The number of countries in the proposed claim was updated to 62.
  3. Red XN The remainder of the proposed claim was not rephrased. This is because the word represent has two definitions:
    1. appointed to act or speak for someone
    2. constitute; amount to

Owing to the second definition above, changing the phrase to use the word represent would not clarify the relationship between the members and the labels they are representatives of. For a concise meaning, please choose concise phrasing.
Regards,  Spintendo  15:23, 1 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

8-MAY-2019[edit]

Thanks for the reply and for partially implementing the edit request, Spintendo.

May I also ask that the first sentence of the article is updated? The sentence is missing an 'a' and doesn't read well.


Dom Athanassiou (talk) 11:58, 8 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 8-MAY-2019

☑ Done  Spintendo  14:18, 8 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

18-FEBRUARY-2020[edit]

A couple suggested changes to the article as the company has a new CEO with a new board, and has signed a major partnership, which has been widely reported.

First suggestion - changes to first paragraph:

Second suggestion - edit to sidebar:

Third suggestion - addition to History:

References

Dom Athanassiou (talk) 17:33, 18 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 18-FEB-2020

✅  Edit request partially implemented  

  1. Red XN The changes to the first paragraph were not implemented because reasons for the change were not provided with the request.[1]
  2. Green tickY The Wikilink for Dave Hansen was removed.
  3. Red XN The addition to the History section was not implemented because this information constitutes normal business practices (the hiring of employees and the commencement of business deals) which are not germane to the article.[2]

Regards,  Spintendo  20:51, 18 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

  1. ^ "Template:Request edit". Wikipedia. 30 December 2019. Instructions for Submitters: If the rationale for a change is not obvious (particularly for proposed deletions), explain.
  2. ^ Per WP:NOTNEWS.