Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the ((done)) tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
Immediate Failures
It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include((cleanup)), ((POV)), ((unreferenced)) or large numbers of ((citation needed)), ((clarify)), or similar tags. (See also ((QF-tags))). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -
I removed the Perfect Chronology note from the lead, but kept the other as it's become standard to put the Japanese/Romanji or general foreign language reading into a note so the lead doesn't get bloated.
Radiant Historia was developed by a team with staff drawn from both Atlus' Megami Tensei series, including Mitsuru Hirata in his debut as director, and Satoshi Takayashiki and artist Hiroshi Konishi from the tri-Ace title Radiata Stories. - the bit about Mitsuru being the director feels out of place, could this mention who is involved, and then a new sentence on Mitsuru's debut. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)19:47, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Running into them will trigger a battle, but Stocke can stun them with his sword and avoid battle - doesn't this also give them a pre-emptive? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)19:59, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Sorted.
Is there no suggestion that Atlus is also known for Persona? I'd suggest that would trump Etrian Odyssey.
I removed Etrian Odyssey, but since Persona is a spin-off of Megami Tensei, I think that's covered by Megami Tensei overall.
The game was reviewed positively - don't we usually use the wording from metacritic?
Done.
The reception section is by far the weakest part of the article (the rest is really good). There's at least 6 good sources for each release that could be used to explain what items were well created and which were badly recieved. This one seems to blow through points. A little expansion needed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)19:59, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I've expanded it greatly.
Upon its release, Radiant Historia debuted at #6 with 32,807 units, being the second highest new release following Fallout: New Vegas and selling through just under 44% of its initial shipment. - on what.
Perfect Chronology debuted in Japan at #1, selling 21,429 units and pushing Nintendo Switch exclusive Arms to #2 after two weeks at the top of the charts.[60] According to data from The NPD Group, the game was the third best-selling 3DS game in the region during February 2018.[61] In the United Kingdom, Perfect Chronology entered the 3DS gaming charts at eighth place.[62] - no details on NA? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)19:59, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Sorted.
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Automated note - If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definitely not mandatory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)