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Reviewer: HueSatLum (talk · contribs) 19:46, 29 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

As thanks for reviewing my article, I will take this review. I will post anything I see here in the coming days. ~HueSatLum 19:46, 29 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• Automated tool finds no dablinks
• FN17 gets a connection timeout, but I expect it is temporary. Otherwise all other ELs good.

• In the past I have found the website to be slow at times but I just checked it now and the connection worked OK. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• I have fixed a license tag on the first image, but I am unsure of the copyright status of File:BG W G Braithwaite.jpg: the source states, "It cannot be used commercially without permission," but I believe it falls under public domain because it was taken before 1964.

• Yes, this was one of my earlier image uploads from when I didn't quite understand the copyright issues. Furthermore, as you probably realised the source website statement regarding use of the image is not accurate. I have updated the image tag. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• Shouldn't the "Military career" section encompass the "First World War" section?

• Have restructured hierarchy. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• "and ended the war in command of the 16th Infantry Brigade" sounds like he ended the war himself; suggest something like "and when the war ended was in command of the 16th Infantry Brigade." ~HueSatLum 04:33, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• have done a variant of your suggestion. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for taking the time to review this one, it is greatly appreciated. And thanks for catching the age at DoD in the lead. That was a howler on my part! Cheers. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 30 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• South Africa is probably overlinking.

Sorted, also removed link on England

• "...he was seconded to the New Zealand Military Forces..." What is "seconded" supposed to mean here?

Added a wikilink

• Is the Volunteer Force the same as the one I linked?

No, the VF of the article is the precursor to the NZ Territorial Force.

• "...outbreak of the First World War" Suggest adding a date/year for context.

Done. Zawed (talk) 06:05, 1 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• "mentioned in despatches" is linked twice. ~HueSatLum 03:29, 31 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. Thanks for the feedback. Zawed (talk) 06:05, 1 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• I'm not familiar with the NZEF, but is it commonplace to be promoted temporary brigadier-general? Is the reason known for this?

Yes, it is common, and not just in the NZEF. In wartime conditions, when a country's military has expanded rapidly (as was the case in the NZ Military Forces which before the war relatively few personnel as opposed to the tens of thousands of soldiers during WWI) this can lead to a shortage of officers, particularly at senior rank. The structure of the military is such that units of certain formations/sizes are commanded by officers of specific ranks. For example, a battalion would be commanded by a lieutenant colonel (or colonel), a brigade by a brigadier - this rank didn't exist in the NZEF in WWI hence brigadier general). Braithewaite had a substantive rank of major but if placed in command of a brigade in this rank, he would be subservient to his fellow brigade commanders who would outrank him. This could be problematic if one of them ordered him to undertake actions which would jeopardise his brigade - hence the temporary promotion to ensure he has appropriate authority to exercise his command (but he would have been paid at his substantive or permanent rank). Your query made me review the article again and I have added a bit about his lieutenant colonel rank being made substantive).

• Ref 16 is a dead link.

I had accidentally filled in the supplement field of the London Gazette template. The link works now.

• Is anything else known about his early and late life? If not, that's fine.

The article pretty much has everything pertaining to both his early and late life.

• All spotchecks done are verified. ~HueSatLum 00:00, 4 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Responded to your queries as above. Thanks. Zawed (talk) 06:52, 4 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• Alright, my concerns have all been adddressed, so I'm passing this as a GA. Nice job on improving this short but complete article. ~HueSatLum 22:28, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]