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The article was promoted by Ucucha 14:14, 1 October 2011 [1].

1991 Perfect Storm[edit]

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Nominator(s): Juliancolton (talk) 19:40, 9 September 2011 (UTC), Hurricanehink (talk · contribs)[reply]
Swells march shoreward from the horizon in great, even bands, their white crests streaming sideways in the wind and their ranks breaking, reforming, and breaking again as they close in on Cape Ann. In the shallows they draw themselves up, hesitate, and then implode against the rocks with a force that seems to shake the entire peninsula. Air trapped inside their grey barrels gets blown out the back walls in geysers higher than the waves themselves. —Junger's The Perfect Storm

The above excerpt from a well-known and high-selling creative nonfiction work by Sebastian Junger refers to the force of a cyclone now called the Perfect Storm, a moniker which emphasizes the rarity and power of the storm. It existed in late 1991, and had effects from Puerto Rico to Nova Scotia, nearly 2,000 miles apart. It is perhaps most notorious for sinking the Andrea Gail, all hands down. She is portrayed in the movie The Perfect Storm as having battered monstrous seas, until succumbing to a swell so large that her attempt to ride it over failed halfway up the crest. The article covers all aspects of the storm, from its origins to its impacts on land and sea, and from the research that followed it to its influence on literature and cinema. Hurricanehink is responsible for a vast majority of the content, but with such an important and substantial article in question, we've decided to make this a joint nomination to even out the workload. Juliancolton (talk) 19:40, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Confirming co-nom, as well as this being a wiki-cup nomination. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:41, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
By the way, we're aiming for this to be featured by its 20th anniversary this Halloween. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:52, 11 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
To drum up some interest, I left some notices on the various WikiProjects that are associated with the article. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:22, 17 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

One tiny suggestion: The Naming section being placed in between the Warnings and preparations and the Impact sections strikes me as a bit of an odd sequence. Perhaps it would be better to conjoin the latter two and move the naming bit in front or behind them (preferably behind)? ★ Auree talk 19:49, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Yea, that's a good call. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:11, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done. Nikkimaria (talk) 01:34, 11 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Eeny bitty suggestion: create North Beach, Massachusetts, so the article doesn't look as, er, red. HurricaneFan25 16:55, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

To be honest, I'm not really sure where the source was referring to, or else I'd link to a county or something. A Google search doesn't help much, either. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:57, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Better? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:36, 22 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Not much. I guess my issue with the wording is that it seems odd the storm could absorb a hurricane but stay a regular storm. It sounds like a hurricane evolved into a hurricane, which doesn't really make sense. What happened in between? Did it stay a nor'easter or a hurricane? Was it another storm entirely? I'm admittedly not an expert on storm naming conventions, but there needs to be another sentence in there I think. Something like "...was an unusual storm formed by the merging of a nor'easter with the remnants of Hurricane Grace in the Atlantic Ocean/on the Atlantic Coast. The storm evolved into Category 1 hurricane late in its life cycle." Something like that seems to read better to me (though as I said I'm obviously not an expert on any aspect of the subject matter). Melicans (talk, contributions) 02:23, 22 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, it's only the first sentence. I believe the rest of the first paragraph explains it sufficiently. I don't want there to be too much detail right off the bat, either. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:33, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I've gone ahead and changed it myself. It isn't about adding extra detail, it's about making sure that the prose is clear and understandable, an FA requirement. "...absorbed one hurricane and ultimately evolved into a small hurricane" is neither. It's a small difference, but I honestly feel that it is much more legible now. Melicans (talk, contributions) 02:24, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Actually, what you changed isn't quite true. It wasn't a merger, it was a pre-existing dominant storm that absorbed another. It now mentions that it became a hurricane twice in the same paragraph. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:32, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Your change was inaccurate, sadly. The hurricane wasn't formed by the merger strictly, but simply enhanced by it. I'll work on it. Juliancolton (talk) 02:33, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:38, 24 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Alright, ask and you shall receive. The only thing I didn't address were Moratorium (which I believe someone else fixed, since it doesn't go to a dab now) and the page numbers, which I feel looks better as 2686 (and not 2,686). I haven't read a 1000+ page book in a while (Harry Potter maxes out in the 800s), but I checked the dictionary and they have just "XXXX" (no comma). IDK if that's a good rationale, but I don't like the look of the comma for that :P --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:24, 25 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. Please check the edit summaries. - Dank (push to talk) 17:26, 26 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

These look good, thanks for getting to them! Juliancolton (talk) 20:41, 26 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sure thing. - Dank (push to talk) 23:14, 26 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]


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