Comments –
- Is the club singular or plural? In the lead, it varies widely in different spots.
- Can you point out where please? I can't see where it differs but it wouldn't surprise me if its blatently obvious. It happens sometimes, especially in the morning! I'm not an expert at writing prose but I try my best to make it roll off the tongue easily.
- The easiest place for me to spot it is in the opening part. We have "Plymouth Argyle Football Club is", "They compete", and "The club was". Quite a variation, especially as the rest of the article sees the club used in a plural sense most of the time. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:12, 6 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- How does it look now? I've seen variations in other season articles which is why I've been a bit confused. Some use "are" when describing the club, others use "is", etc.
"They were also invited to compete in the Western League, a competition which was considered as secondary to the Southern League." Lose "as" since it is an unneeded word in the sentence.
"but it was to be Argyle's last as a member...". Last what? I'm assuming last season, but it doesn't say that earlier in the sentence.
- "with Argyle being placed in the latter." Never have been a fan of these "with ... -ing" type sentences. As a replacement, you could try "; Argyle was (or were) placed in the latter."
- Changed it to "Argyle were placed in the latter."
- Would you mind splitting this into its own sentence? Read it and you'll see what I mean. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:12, 6 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- I see, a run-on sentence. Done.
"before winning another League title in the 1958–59 season, the re-unified Third Division." Is there supposed to be another "in" after the comma. If not, the last part of the sentence should be moved to what it's intended to expand upon (the title).
- Added "in" after the comma.
All of the colors should have symbols for accessibility, not just the promotion and relegation ones.
- Added one each for winner and runner-up colours.
Bolding is starting to become discouraged in FLs, so the entire season column could stand to lose it. The normal alternative (italics) is already in use, so I have no real issue with using it for highlighting here; however, there should be a note in the key on its use in the position column, to match the other existing notes.
- Removed the bolded column and champion positions.
Note J: Try not to have a sentence start with a number, such as in "21 of the 22 Southern League...".
Note W: Picky, but I don't think the hyphen in "newly-united" is needed. From my FAC experience, most hyphens after -ly are discouraged by the leading prose reviewers.
In references 61 and 62, the publisher (The Independent) should be in italics since it is a printed publication. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:31, 1 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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