- Y I checked the lead to see if the lead summarizes the article and each fact is repeated in the body. I see this in the lead "aside from any all-star games afterwards" but there is no mention of all-star games in the article. All other elements of the lead summarize the cited content.
- Added info on all-star games at the bottom of "Aftermath". PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Lead - the word "afterwards" is not used in the US and because this is a US sport and playoff we should use afterward
- Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Lead - "Michigan led at the conclusion of the first quarter due to two touchdown rushes" I would prefer rewording, maybe "Michigan led at the conclusion of the first quarter because they had two rushing touchdowns"? or another wording?
- Changed to "after two touchdown rushes" - open to other wording suggestions but I think "because they had two rushing touchdowns" is a tad clunky. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Lead - "Washington answered with another field goal" answered seems colloquial. Consider replacing.
- Changed to "Washington scored another field goal" - I also changed "ultimately allowing" to "ultimately leading to". PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Michigan - "regarding scouting of future opponents." Might be missing "the"
- Added. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y "35 games in order to scout future opponents" could just say "35 games to scout future opponents"
- Removed. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Michigan - "regular season" should this be hyphenated ?
- This phrase is nearly always used in the context of college football without the hyphen. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y First half - "over the course of" Occurs twice, might be redundant. Might replace with throughout?
- Replaced as suggested. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y First half - "second touchdown in four plays having taken less" how about rewording to "second touchdown in four plays which took less"?
- Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y First half - "Following the long rush" maybe "Following the long rushing play"?
- I don't think this is particularly unclear, since the play is described in the previous sentence, though I can change it if you think it is confusing. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y First half - "doing so and turned the ball over on downs themselves." maybe "also turned the ball over?" "on downs themselves" seems to be extra here.
- Removed "themselves" but I think "on downs" is valuable information here since "turned the ball over" commonly implies an interception or a fumble, rather than a turnover on downs. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y First half - "went three-and-out on their last drive of the half and punted" maybe say they had three plays and the punted on fourth. three-and-out might not be good for non-American football readers.
- "Three-and-out" is linked near the end of the first paragraph of this section - it is also used further up when talking about both teams punting (though personally I think the link gives enough context on its own for non-football-familiar readers). I am open to suggestions but I would like to avoid having to explain fully what a 3-and-out is, especially since that isn't done for other football-specific terms. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Second Half - "Washington scored a field goal of their own on their following drive" "of their own" seems too casual.
- Removed. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Second Half - "Washington soon after found themselves facing 4th & 13 on the Michigan 30-yard line" the first part of thes ready funny.
- Moved "Soon after" to the beginning of the sentence. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Second Half - "was replayed because of an offensive holding call that offset it." I think we can eliminate the last three words
- Removed. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Aftermath - "San Francisco 49ers head coach from to 2011 to 2014 and played" Might be an extra word here?
- Good catch, removed. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y You can also go through the article to see if numbers 0-9 are following MOS:SPELL09.
- I had a read through and didn't see anything that went against that; I left yardage counts ("1-yard rush", "8-yard pass", etc.) and yard lines for consistency throughout the article (I'd rather have these in numerals than things like "eighty-one-yard rush" spelled out every time). I also think down-and-distance is better displayed with numerals ("4th & 4" instead of "fourth and four") since they are rarely spelled out and more easily readable IMO using numerals. If you see anything that needs to be changed with respect to this guideline that I may have missed let me know. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Bruxton: Thanks for taking this review! Everything above either changed or responded to. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:58, 6 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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