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Y Lead - needs to be developed, and should be a summary of the article; as of now it is insufficient.
Done. Is it better now?
Y Body "Ravens' Craig tower house castle in Plockton, Lochalsh was designed by Begg and built from scratch" Please find another way to say that built the house- from scratch seems colloquial.
Is "from the ground up" better?
Y Body "Afterwards, when he was 22," suggest we remove the word "Afterwards"
Done.
Y Body "was an adviser for National Trust for Scotland, and vice president" needs a determiner like "the" before National and "was" before vice.
Done.
Y Body "complete with winery" suggest you add an "a" before winery
Done.
Y Body "to aid bringing logs to main hall" suggest a determiner (the) before main hall
Done.
Y Lead should remove citations from the lead per MOS:LEADCITE - FYI it is already cited in the body
Done.
Y "The main hall is 5 m by 7.27 m, with the size dictated by a triangular" use conversion templates like 5 m (16 ft) and 7.27 m (23.9 ft)
Done.
Y Body regarding the Ravens' Craig section. We need to say when the Tower House was completed or built.
Done.
Y We should also see if we combine these single sentences into the paragraph.
Done by you I think?
Y £750,000 an inflation calculator might be helpful here (equivalent to $1,370,677 in 2023) note-the year is incorrect in the conversion I randomly put 2006
The figure is from 2022, and the inflation template only works up until 2021 it seems. I have though fixed it to say £725,000 rather than £750,000, to align with the source.
Y since the architect's website is dead, we should probably remove it from the infobox
Done.
Y Awards section "He retired in December 2009" was already stated above in career section.
Y Citation 2 is not really RS but is useable as WP:ABOUTSELF - keep in mind that it cannot be used for self-serving claims.
Y Career Citation 5 is correct
Y Career retirement is supported by citation 2 - uncontroversial
Y Castles section "Begg designed the Scandic Crown Hotel, Edinburgh in 1988–89" is supported by the citations
Y Citation 19 checks out
Y Citation 20 checks out
Y Citation 22 checks out
Y Citation 23 checks out
Thank you for the edits. I reworked the lead a bit. But I think we need to expand the article based on the obituary below.
Y Seem like quite a bit of info in this source (number 23) in the citations. I archived the link and it looks like he had been married with children. I suggest a personal life section after Ravens' Craig. Move his retirement and death to that section but start with his personal life and marriage. Bruxton (talk) 01:26, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I have performed some cleanup and organization to the article. I also added a quote from him about his house.
Y My checks of citations show that the sources with the exception of the "about self" source called out above and the Legacy.com article appear to be quality and accurately support the prose. The Legacy source is attributed to the ScotsmanBruxton (talk) 19:23, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
Yes
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
The article and layout are significantly improved. It was a pleasure to work with you.
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